Is this love or is it goodbye?

By hate_doll

I'm falling over the stars
You put in place
To write my name
In the glittering sky

It's so perfect
How from far off,
The stars just seem to glow
And invite celestial warmth
But up close
You see they are jagged
And only cut to cut deep
So destroy me, baby
I'm all yours

Slice me with the promises
We made to each other

Now I'm left
Sifting through the sands
Of forget-me-nots
That lied
Failing to hold
Their little piece of tragedy
Your little tragedy
Our tragedy

I invited passion
For tea today
We discussed clandestine
Desires
She didn't even touch her food

So I fell asleep
On your shoulder
After taking my sleeping pill
Your kiss

I think I overdosed

Wake me
When the mo[u]rning comes

...whytt

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Published on Monday, September 27, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

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March 3rd, 2011

Comments on "Is this love or is it goodbye?"

On Friday, March 4, 2011, XOCHITL (40) wrote:

I really liked this piece .....your description of words was captivating. I look forward to reading more of your work :-)
A former member wrote: that was amzing
On Tuesday, April 18, 2006, mywristshurt (408) wrote:

it was okay for me.. i mean a like it, its your thing and you have your own style, but it wasnt the greatest you could do
On Sunday, November 14, 2004, Loserland (113) wrote:

very powerful...love the last line
A former member wrote: a very honest peice, has an aura of it's own, i think i've been missing out by not reading your works yet, i shall rectify my mistake at once. bravo
On Tuesday, October 5, 2004, Amanda Parnell (57) wrote:

and you have struck me with radience from this piece. holy shit. *queenie*
A former member wrote: i love you work it is so passionately and full of emotion it makes you feel like you are watching the whole thing. ~kristen~
On Wednesday, September 29, 2004, WinterGrave (258) wrote:

wow, amazing write, such emotion in depth should always be praised.~~~Grave
A former member wrote: ah, you don't need my comments..everybody else said it..and isn't it funny how our most painful moments bring our most beautiful creations..kind of like childbirth..hopefully you'll forget the pain and praise the child...
On Tuesday, September 28, 2004, Savannah (218) wrote:

wonderful as always
A former member wrote: This is so well written and perfect.. It made me feel hazy and satisfied. Mm. Lovelylovelylovely!
On Monday, September 27, 2004, urbanhumility (1175) wrote:

your words like to hang around my head once and a while.........thank you sweet poet.................urban
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Lucia (5) wrote:

....speechless... wonderful as always... write more often!!
A former member wrote: Pinprick to the Heart.core. (before & after) Fuck. I'm dwelling off your bitter edge.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Lynaes (859) wrote:

This is absolutely perfect... you've worded everything beautifully, and I could deeply relate.. Heart-hitting work here.. And the "I invited passion" stanza is killer... awesome work, I love it.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Blood of Winter (296) wrote:

Whytt when it comes to the artistry that is words formed to poetry you are noticably above the rest with your defined style that is all your own...please do not stop writing so wonderfully...
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Six-Out (1435) wrote:

Whitney dear...this was too much. Your words are heavy...they hurt. Wonderful write...very powerful.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Zhee (529) wrote:

this was amazing.. very well written...
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Butterfly (99) wrote:

Wow this is just awesome. I love this. Excellant piece.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, FallenFaith (44) wrote:

I absolutely hate 3 word comments but all i can say is beautiful.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, GreekPhilosopher (156) wrote:

Hehehe... I Guess I Overdosed. GPhD.
On Monday, September 27, 2004, Anth (1133) wrote:

brilliance,absolute brilliance, the second verse is great,cool style to this.it just..reads..so well,loved it,especially the fifth verse
On Monday, September 27, 2004, GreekPhilosopher (156) wrote:

Wow... Simply Stirring. And Probably The Best Image I Have Ever Read Was About Your "Sleeping Pill" I Loved It. Gosh, Im So Gushy Lately. Hehehe. Thanks. GPhD.