without......

By urbanhumility

i am without.........

there is a void i cannot name

there is a man i was.....


i am entrapped......with all my intelligence.....and failing wisdom.....


there my "will",......forgotten.

i must fathom this deepness....

i must breech this dreamlike wall.....


i must see my reflection in the lazy stream i lay by.....

i am without......

i must reach within.....

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Copyright 2004 urbanhumility
Published on Tuesday, September 21, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • SummerCoat On Sunday, March 4, 2012, SummerCoat (29)By person wrote:

    YES....beautifully put.

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, April 7, 2010, carlosjackal (3010)By person wrote:

    Powerful, absorbing...This is both a fantastic mantra and a warning to never forget that the void is never very far away...Brilliant.

  • Scarrzz On Wednesday, July 1, 2009, Scarrzz (238)By person wrote:

    I appreciate this one, Urban. It's so hard to see oneself without the filters of what we want to be. Even harder to admit our failings inside, own them, and strive to rise above. Well spoken. Scholar

  • Mylissa On Sunday, June 28, 2009, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    aww the struggle with in ourselves. So passionate and full of raw emotion. I can feel each on of your words, as if you are speaking them in my ear. Wonderfully done.

  • Mylissa On Sunday, June 28, 2009, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    one...of your words...sheesh I can't type tonight. :oP

  • Err0r On Sunday, May 7, 2006, Err0r (365)By person wrote:

    The ending really sent this one out with a powerful understanding. I like how things wrap up nicely at the end. :)

  • NikesRain On Monday, February 27, 2006, NikesRain (1298)By person wrote:

    failing wisdom i think not but that it shines here within these flowing intense lines so aptly and deeply put... wonderful

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, February 14, 2006, TaintedButterfly (670)By person wrote:

    God, I have no words.

  • Sin On Monday, April 4, 2005, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    concise and powerful...this speaks volumes ~kristy

  • steuss On Friday, March 4, 2005, steuss (92)By person wrote:

    This whole piece is so complete. I get the sense of loss with each line, without... each line is without something intangible, but that makes it full of meaning and beauty (in words at least) well done!

  • sIo On Friday, December 31, 2004, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    blue's got the right words here, you truly are one of a great mind.

  • blue On Friday, December 10, 2004, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    one looks in, one stands out....you my friend....are a brilliant man. to be sure. ~b

  • A former member wrote: Last two lines.. wow.. brilliant work, sweets.

  • A former member wrote: "there is a man i was.."what a brilliant line....adoration and applause. -zay

  • A former member wrote: I've been there. I've known it. I still know it. Welcome. -END-

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Monday, November 15, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    indeed a brilliant and philosophical piece...remind of me Nietzche...-l-

  • Sin On Wednesday, November 10, 2004, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    this was deep and profound and brilliantly worded, great write ~kristy

  • Solace On Tuesday, November 9, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    Brilliantly woven...The message is clear to me, and a virtuous one indeed...Different angles...Different views...Oft to be without is to search within...

  • diavolessa On Tuesday, October 26, 2004, diavolessa (208)By person wrote:

    I am without, I must reach within The most profound and true lines I have felt in the longest time! now I remember why I love your poetry so much.

  • A former member wrote: Perfect. I will certainly return to this just because it reaches me . . tightening my heart. ~ Rose

  • A former member wrote: this is wonderful.. the halting flow works wonders for the mood... i really like how the end unravels... beautiful job!

  • Mr King On Saturday, October 16, 2004, Mr King (547)By person wrote:

    glad you have seen this... glad you have declared it a breakdown... REACH ON THEN my friend... my brother... REACH ON... 1 LOVE, Seth & Trish too.

  • A former member wrote: 'there is a man i was' amazing line. a deep sense of a tranquil lack of completion. there is a void i cannot name,tyhere is a man i was-amazing lines, ill probably remember them for a long time. great use of morbid expression.drik

  • OLd SouL On Wednesday, October 6, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    this is perfect... "I am without..... I must reach witin" dig deep and pull out a perception thats managable and the only place to find it is within ourselves... bottom line.. thats all we are.. thats all we have. Fantastic work :::OLd

  • sixsixnine On Wednesday, September 29, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    transcending energy in this piece... simply Atomic! reading again *669*

  • GreekPhilosopher On Wednesday, September 22, 2004, GreekPhilosopher (156)By person wrote:

    Great Stuff... I Got Something Similar. Its Just So Interesting How A Similar Concept Can Come Out In Many Fantastic Ways. Thanks For This Side. GPhD.

  • Zhee On Tuesday, September 21, 2004, Zhee (529)By person wrote:

    this was wonderful... ! nicely done... and good luck! :)

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