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Blighted Within
By Zhee
(to a patient....)
I've defeated myself,
Left myself behind,
Walking over the pieces
Of my crumbling mind,
And I'm diseased
(Deep beneath my skin)
I bleed on the outside-
But I'm blighted within.
My burning walls
Will not set free,
This intoxicating hell,
This demon inside of me.
I have damned myself
With this consuming pain,
As I let this poison
Tear up my veins.
Now my flesh is rotting,
My soul is dying,
There is no heaven,
This drug is lying.
And I'm diseased
(Deep beneath my skin)
I bleed on the outside-
But I'm blighted within...
I'm torn on the surface-
(It's peeling off),
And inside-
I'm empty...
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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Thursday, September 9, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Blighted Within"
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On Saturday, September 15, 2007, Delphoid-Q
(213)
wrote:
I totally get you here. Especially looking at it from a doctor's perspective.
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On Friday, October 8, 2004, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
emptiness is not a fun feeling
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, stuart_pid
(135) wrote:
beautiful imagery here, i love the way the last stanza sort of stops short, (doesnt follow the rhythm of the other stanzas i mean) it causes the last lines to echo through the mind reinforcing the poem.
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A former member wrote:
All I can do is exhale with this one.
Hopeful, and hopeless too.
~Shane~
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On Sunday, September 12, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
Crushing stuff, defeated, conceded...like defining a moment alone in silence, but inside theres screaming...
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A former member wrote:
hell yeah, great stuff zhee, delightful read.
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On Thursday, September 9, 2004, TheLastDragon
(69) wrote:
You can feel the darkness of the poem just by reading it. Good write.
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On Thursday, September 9, 2004, Zara Synn
(57) wrote:
This peice is so full of defeat, yet it still remains so beautiful. You've done a great job with this one; the words you've chosen to tell the story fit together so nicely.
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On Thursday, September 9, 2004, Dayer
(162) wrote:
wow....that is all I can say, just wow....
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On Thursday, September 9, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
Zhee the way you connect these words is disturbing beyond words. Not in a "I am going to freak in two seconds!" kind of way. But in a saddening, slowly darkening way. Where I am one step behind every word.
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On Thursday, September 9, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
It seemed obvious at first this poem, and it still does to the eye, but the true effect of the words are one step behind of the eye. I am glad I came here. -Nadir-
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