reverie of roses

By slow.burn.star

roses edged in gold creep slowly up the black ivory banister leading to your room. melted red wax pooled at the base of each candle i laid around your head. drifting slowly through the air in milky streaks, the scent of honey twisted down the stairs and laid its lips upon my face. you're eyes like fluttering doves at dawns rise. i could see you before i even had this dream. you're nimbus of light still warm in my hands as i spun myself with grace towards you. brushing open the gauzy white drapes that enclosed your bed. the candles burned low like warm little stars. the black coils of your hair cascaded in silken waves over the pillows, framing your pale, placid face. i wanted to reach out and touch you, but instead i knelt beside you. your mouth quivered, pink. you awoke; my alabaster reverie
& just as in my dreams before this,
you closed your porcelain hands around my neck
and delicately choked me to sleep.

Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited. Ask the author first.
Copyright 2004 slow.burn.star
Published on Monday, September 6, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
Log In or Join (free) to see the special features here.

Comments on "reverie of roses"

Log in to post comments.
  • Nimue44 On Wednesday, December 24, 2014, Nimue44 (296)By person wrote:

    Sweet, silkenee, delicate, like having an angel wing cover your face, and then, boom! Choking. The change from loving caresses to murderous caresses, how I enjoyed that.

  • Scarrzz On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Scarrzz (238)By person wrote:

    I like the imagery and the flow, and what a delicious twist at the end that was! * You may want to do a quick proofread/edit, being careful of the your/you're trap. * Was it my imagination only, or were both figures in this dream feminine? Unusual, enjoyable eroticism. Scholar

  • FallenSky On Sunday, June 28, 2009, FallenSky (42)By person wrote:

    This felt like a stream of thought, speckled with beautiful images followed by disturbing ones and everything in between

  • A former member wrote: I don't think I've ever been this much effected by a piece in my life...it's so elaborate and sultry...up until the very last line. I must favorite.

  • Revolting Theatre On Sunday, September 26, 2004, Revolting Theatre (31)By person wrote:

    wow

  • Dayer On Monday, September 6, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    very nice imagery, & I loved the ending

  • Railway_Butterfly On Monday, September 6, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354)By person wrote:

    *just something about all of your writing that stands out....either way,this was beautiful..Butterfly..xxx...

  • Railway_Butterfly On Monday, September 6, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354)By person wrote:

    'you're eyes like fluttering doves at dawn's rise'...the structure you've used here appears somewhat different to your usual style,though theres something about this that still makes it clear that this is your work...if that makes sense...just something a

  • ONEANDLONELY On Monday, September 6, 2004, ONEANDLONELY (117)By person wrote:

    first time reader...but not the last.. i enjoyed this, especially the ending...

  • Six-Out On Monday, September 6, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    no words are around to describe how this left me...fucking amazing...not just how it's written...but the emotions, the feelings it evoked. I love it when you post, don't leave us for that long again..

Contribution Level

Poets Bookmarking This Work
slow.burn.star's Favorite Poets
slow.burn.star's Favorite Works
Share/Save This Post



Join DarkPoetry Join to get a profile like this for yourself. It's quick and free.

How to Criticize Without Causing Offense
© 1998-2024 DarkPoetry LLC
Donate
[Join (free)]    [More Poetry]    [Get Help]    [Our Poets]    [Read Poems]    [Terms & Privacy]