the shattering of the dream

By KittyStryker




they break each other's hearts
as if
they were bottles
and threaten wildly
with the ragged ends
prepared
to battle
for the blame



neither
would admit
this is all a defense
to protect
the still wounded organ
in their chest



each
would happily point the finger
and lay the guilt
in their lover's bed





but both
will sleep tonight
with the shadowy figure
of regret

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Copyright 2004 Bast
Published on Monday, August 23, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Lots of reflection on fights in relationships

  • i tremble On Thursday, September 14, 2006, i tremble (29)By person wrote:

    *speechless*

  • xserratedsoulx On Thursday, July 27, 2006, xserratedsoulx (212)By person wrote:

    GOOD WRITE!!! ~lauren~

  • A former member wrote: a lot of your peices i've read remind me of my last relationship... it was fucked up... i am glad it is over but your words capture the feelings beautifully!

  • Dayer On Monday, September 6, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    this is very powerful...wow...

  • steuss On Thursday, September 2, 2004, steuss (92)By person wrote:

    You capture such intense moments with your words and description, It is amazingly well done. I've been there. I know it, but this is how it feels transcribed to words... wonderful.

  • Mademoiselle_Minx On Tuesday, August 31, 2004, Mademoiselle_Minx (108)By person wrote:

    I hope this isnt my situation...but I think it probably is.

  • aXe FactoR On Monday, August 30, 2004, aXe FactoR (335)By person wrote:

    wow, its one of the more powerful poem of this length ive read... very meaningful.. -MeL-

  • mysticventures On Thursday, August 26, 2004, mysticventures (538)By person wrote:

    your words are so true to us all Bast

  • urbanhumility On Thursday, August 26, 2004, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    one of the most intelligent well spoken pieces i have ever read of yours........clear and resounding with truth and clarity..........well done grasshopper..........urban

  • Invader Lyn On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Invader Lyn (48)By person wrote:

    Awesome. You described the situation(s) perfectly. Personal, yet general. Great write.

  • Lynaes On Monday, August 23, 2004, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    I love this so much.. the descriptions are so true and unique. I especially like the "neither would admit" stanza. and I love it being spoken in the third person too. Amazing work.

  • Alacer_Cogitatus On Monday, August 23, 2004, Alacer_Cogitatus (140)By person wrote:

    well done. ive enjoyed it. A_C

  • glasshouse On Monday, August 23, 2004, glasshouse (548)By person wrote:

    What a sad and haunting image. I wish I did not know how this felt. Beautifully done, as always. -Glass


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