Quiplash

By purr_verse

of course i pretended that it didn't matter;
that words were as nothing; that such hadn't hurt,
and through the years passing the scars were not visible
so no-one could know the truth was much worse
than i think was expected - it was, really, childish -
yet somehow those moments still rip me apart,
buried deep in subconscia and doubting my image
of self well-concocted (to shelter my heart)
and of course i pretend still that it doesn't matter -
that words were ephemerae, cheap, in the past -
but through the years passing gods i still remember;
internally shake at damnations that last
though they should not
i could not
forget...



:



i never really loved you



:



do
not
speak
to
me
of
sticks
and
stones.

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Copyright 2004 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Thursday, August 19, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Tuesday, December 19, 2017, Cassette (1144)By person wrote:

    that such hadn't hurt.... you could have said this and I would still understand.

  • A former member wrote: in the beginning there was the word... in the middle there is a lack of words... in the end we wish we had more words... life is a word... why would something so close to what we are ever be less than things that dwell upon the earth without world?

  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, March 20, 2007, carlosjackal (3010)By person wrote:

    Brilliantly formatted with a killer 9 word/line descending final stanza. Bloomin' great!

  • flying_fox On Saturday, July 22, 2006, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    Somehow I have missed this from you... it is just ouchy ouchy ouchy. I feel myself morph into a being 10 times my size to quash whomever it was who inspired these words and feelings. The last stanza is so quietly effective...

  • flying_fox On Saturday, July 22, 2006, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    I want to scoop you up and protect you from all hurt in this world. the only consolation is that it inspires just magnificent writing. I can't express how wonderful I think you are. *hugs*

  • A former member wrote: ah, this is brilliant beyond my words..you are beautiful.

  • A former member wrote: Eloquent beyond words!

  • Trail of Fiends On Thursday, February 17, 2005, Trail of Fiends (37)By person wrote:

    brutal.

  • A former member wrote: Ouch! A knock-out punch. Fantastic.

  • Sepulcrawl On Tuesday, December 28, 2004, Sepulcrawl (78)By person wrote:

    This is very well bolstered by the final stanza. You'll have to show me something you got published one time. I love your writing, as always. -pxc

  • A former member wrote: An incredible write . . unbearably painful, utterly profound and confrontingly impessive.. heart-wrenching . . astounding ~ Rose

  • knightmirror On Thursday, September 30, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    very powerful write...VERY!!!!!.....and the closing line is just WOW...****-much love,chris

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Saturday, September 11, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    i never read anything angry from you until now...it was a very short, simple and straightforward piece..raw and uninhibited..i really enjoyed it...-l-

  • A former member wrote: very pwerfull words. i willl be sure to read more of your past works,and when ever you post something new! ;)

  • Armand On Sunday, September 5, 2004, Armand (57)By person wrote:

    your pen is mightier than any warrior's sword. and after slicing and dicing, the once hunted now stands over her pitiful prey and administers the final fatal blow... game over. what a glorious talent you are, natalie

  • Exodus On Monday, August 30, 2004, Exodus (172)By person wrote:

    wow....very very powerful....it felt as though i was flashing back.....i really felt this one.....its very strong....lovely work as always...great work

  • Solace On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    You'd win any title fight, get it? Title fight...lol..."I never really loved you" like shattering the pyramids...Brilliance

  • Dayer On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    "do not speak to me of sticks and stones" - amazing writing ;)

  • Jadednoir On Tuesday, August 24, 2004, Jadednoir (28)By person wrote:

    these words stall in my heart. ~Jade

  • A former member wrote: 'do not speak to me of sticks and stones.'SLAP! An aether sanctum of beautiful anger& neglection that speaks the truth in poetica w/ vengeful teeth. The styled form is visually moving& stunning...[ephemerae] this word feels velvet coated; soft w/ fangs& d

  • A former member wrote: ... fangs& devouring time...lovely...'buried deep in subconscia and doubting my image of self...'...wonderful...

  • Zhee On Monday, August 23, 2004, Zhee (529)By person wrote:

    cuts straight through... amazing work!

  • A former member wrote: Has a real painful atmosphere..I really like the ending aswell. brilliant work!

  • antiScripsony On Sunday, August 22, 2004, antiScripsony (30)By person wrote:

    I dig the pain. If I were to ever write an instrumental piece and record it, I would want this to precede it, spoken word.

  • A former member wrote: This translated to the feeling of physically being kicked. Well delivered.

  • A former member wrote: Damn the words that form our self opinions, that make our hearts less whole than they were when we started, that make us less than what we ought to be, and damn those that dismiss the power of words.

  • Lynaes On Friday, August 20, 2004, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    Oh wow purr.. I don't know what to say to this.. so biting and raw.. I have to say, the title is perfect, certainly lashes at you. especially the last part.. Wonderfully indulgent, as always.

  • NikesRain On Friday, August 20, 2004, NikesRain (1298)By person wrote:

    beautiful work that touches upon a very hard hidden truth. Blunt, honest and forceful.

  • A former member wrote: A bit different than what I expected, but more than I expected. Powerful words. I was pounding my fists by the end of it. +T.P.U+

  • OLd SouL On Thursday, August 19, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    Title is absolutely perfect. It seems the more you keep posting the more I see how broad your horizon is. I love that in a poet. And the ending, well, it left its mark on me. :::OLd

  • Six-Out On Thursday, August 19, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    ...wow....amazing write purr...simply amazing, so harsh, and to the point...you never cease to make me stand in awe.

  • cre On Thursday, August 19, 2004, cre (411)By person wrote:

    Oh . . I swear my head spun a little after this one . . god, I *love* it . . it's a harsh, direct look at a piece of life that left its mark . . and it's an incredible write.

  • Northstar On Thursday, August 19, 2004, Northstar (375)By person wrote:

    oh this piece really hurts---very well done--you really let us in through this piece while powerfully writing these emotions out

  • stormtalk On Thursday, August 19, 2004, stormtalk (729)By person wrote:

    Hahaha, a difficult title to live up to, indeed! I like the ending, it hits very hard.


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