3 freewrite

By Jonas

malt shake it up baby
shake it back and forth
shake it hard shake it lazy
bake it like a 40w bulb
easy bake oven
take it to the blind place where no one sees
the red lines in your eyes behind the red lines
in the sky
as the sun boils new chemicals
burning the skin off of new babies
burning the tape off of the ritual table
sacrifice devices that rip deeper than a wishing well
where the quarters fall down forever and are nothing
and all the wishes that ever were would make
a man rich

he could buy happiness
or a whole lot of whores

in the bed of the mother
in the bed of the father
in the body of the brother
knocking but still intruding
polluting the smoke stacks pour up my ass
and i boil up and over and i slime the sky
and i'd like to scream this black out of me

like tar
like chainsmoking
like wanting cancer or something like drugs
like whores
like hold me close between your tits
let me breath the comfort of the little bit
of the great mother in you
let me sin you up some
let me dig my everything under your skins
pincushion baby
a bitch with rabies foaming at the mouth
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
stitch
cut burnt
this fire keeps sleep from me
pollutes my dreams

watch the center
ring
watch the top hat
watch the montrous
thing

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Copyright 2004 Jonas
Published on Thursday, August 12, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Sin On Saturday, July 9, 2005, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    jesus that was one hell of a ride...my minds still reeling...

  • A former member wrote: "take it to the blind place where no one sees the red lines in your eyes behind the red lines " that was a superb line, this whole thing was crazy, i love crazy, yet it made sense to me, which is also strange...bah, glad im reading you anyway

  • Solace On Monday, September 6, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    "like wanting cancer or something like drugs" This was brilliantly rendered, dichotomies and confrontations with thought, free and unfettered...

  • mysticventures On Thursday, August 26, 2004, mysticventures (538)By person wrote:

    wow! just don't know what to say after reading this one - can I have some of what your taking?

  • urbanhumility On Thursday, August 26, 2004, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    i want to have a biopsy of your brain, if you pass before i , possibly to map your strange and fantastic world..........urban

  • Anth On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    i read so much of your works and dont comment,strangely, some poets take over your thoughts,its hard to gather them at the end to elaborate on brilliance

  • Zara Synn On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Zara Synn (57)By person wrote:

    This is one of the most interesting things I've read! You make sense of such oscurity.

  • birdwell On Friday, August 13, 2004, birdwell (140)By person wrote:

    i can see the naked piper lead his assembly of whores down the street pushing a wheelbarrow, brimming with green quarters.. :) great write ~db~

  • purr_verse On Friday, August 13, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    this whole thing just dragged me through it, but "let me dig my everything under your skins" is just particularly of high excellence indeed. fab write; fab automata.

  • capt_funguy On Friday, August 13, 2004, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    seething stream of regurge philanthropy... a pleasure to receive .. you make pollution - so dirty .. monstrous is an understatement .. funguy

  • nell On Thursday, August 12, 2004, nell (271)By person wrote:

    oh boy, this was a killer=) loved the free flow of it and how absurdly it all fit together

  • manywalks On Thursday, August 12, 2004, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    Jesus in a Jeep! My dear, you just captivate me. ~ wen

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