3 freewrite
By Jonas
malt shake it up baby
shake it back and forth
shake it hard shake it lazy
bake it like a 40w bulb
easy bake oven
take it to the blind place where no one sees
the red lines in your eyes behind the red lines
in the sky
as the sun boils new chemicals
burning the skin off of new babies
burning the tape off of the ritual table
sacrifice devices that rip deeper than a wishing well
where the quarters fall down forever and are nothing
and all the wishes that ever were would make
a man rich
he could buy happiness
or a whole lot of whores
in the bed of the mother
in the bed of the father
in the body of the brother
knocking but still intruding
polluting the smoke stacks pour up my ass
and i boil up and over and i slime the sky
and i'd like to scream this black out of me
like tar
like chainsmoking
like wanting cancer or something like drugs
like whores
like hold me close between your tits
let me breath the comfort of the little bit
of the great mother in you
let me sin you up some
let me dig my everything under your skins
pincushion baby
a bitch with rabies foaming at the mouth
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
itch
desire
stitch
cut burnt
this fire keeps sleep from me
pollutes my dreams
watch the center
ring
watch the top hat
watch the montrous
thing
Comments on "3 freewrite"
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On Saturday, July 9, 2005, Sin
(1168) wrote:
jesus that was one hell of a ride...my minds still reeling...
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A former member wrote:
"take it to the blind place where no one sees
the red lines in your eyes behind the red lines " that was a superb line, this whole thing was crazy, i love crazy, yet it made sense to me, which is also strange...bah, glad im reading you anyway
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On Monday, September 6, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
"like wanting cancer or something like drugs" This was brilliantly rendered, dichotomies and confrontations with thought, free and unfettered...
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, mysticventures
(538) wrote:
wow! just don't know what to say after reading this one - can I have some of what your taking?
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On Thursday, August 26, 2004, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
i want to have a biopsy of your brain, if you pass before i , possibly to map your strange and fantastic world..........urban
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Anth
(1133) wrote:
i read so much of your works and dont comment,strangely, some poets take over your thoughts,its hard to gather them at the end to elaborate on brilliance
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On Wednesday, August 25, 2004, Zara Synn
(57) wrote:
This is one of the most interesting things I've read! You make sense of such oscurity.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, birdwell
(140) wrote:
i can see the naked piper lead his assembly of whores down the street pushing a wheelbarrow, brimming with green quarters.. :) great write ~db~
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
this whole thing just dragged me through it, but "let me dig my everything under your skins" is just particularly of high excellence indeed. fab write; fab automata.
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On Friday, August 13, 2004, capt_funguy
(778) wrote:
seething stream of regurge philanthropy... a pleasure to receive .. you make pollution - so dirty .. monstrous is an understatement .. funguy
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On Thursday, August 12, 2004, nell
(271) wrote:
oh boy, this was a killer=) loved the free flow of it and how absurdly it all fit together
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On Thursday, August 12, 2004, manywalks
(750) wrote:
Jesus in a Jeep! My dear, you just captivate me. ~ wen