Atrophy

By Zhee

blood is smeared all over
the fractured mirror of my eyes,
dripping to paint a livid red
landscape of corroding lies.

seeping through fissured visions
the arid dictum of feeling,
in the crevices of the eroded soul -
the subtle atrophy of my being....

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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Monday, August 2, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, November 14, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    left me pondering

  • thinevoicetragic On Monday, October 25, 2004, thinevoicetragic (52)By person wrote:

    Bad Ass short poems Rock.. Emily dickenson has so many short poems.. And thanx for all the comments thought I'd return the respect..~Megan~

  • Angst Queen On Friday, October 8, 2004, Angst Queen (370)By person wrote:

    short sweet dark. i've read and commented on all of your works now and i am utterly amazed that you even -look-at mine

  • WinterGrave On Friday, September 24, 2004, WinterGrave (258)By person wrote:

    well done, a most enjoyable read~~~Grave

  • A former member wrote: thanks for the comments..hugs from Blutengel

  • A former member wrote: Did you ever hear the Clive Barker quote. He said "Every body is a book of blood. Whenever we're open, we're red." This poem expresses that phrase most eloquenty. Thank you. ~Shane~

  • Solace On Saturday, August 7, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    The arid dictum of feeling :) Par excellence in totality...apologies for brief comment...rushing

  • Zara Synn On Saturday, August 7, 2004, Zara Synn (57)By person wrote:

    I loved the second stanza, though none of it was unloveable. Short yet abundant in imagery.

  • A former member wrote: love the imagery here, intelligent word use. great stuff.

  • A former member wrote: and yeah, welcome to DP Zhee, i can see you'll fit right in...

  • Anth On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    i liked the second verse here,creative and unique,impressive

  • purr_verse On Monday, August 2, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    mmm! i especially liked the first stanza; excellent rhythm and impressive vocab... fine innermirror piece; welcome to dp. :)

  • Northstar On Monday, August 2, 2004, Northstar (375)By person wrote:

    I can really relate to what you are expressing here

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