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One Eye Weeping
By Soulseeker
Green iris filled with pain,
crying is proof of being sane.
One eye remains weeping,
whether I am walking or sleeping.
The other eye is open and fully aware,
it does all the thinking while the other is in despair.
A new tear emerges with every blink.
It;s not that you have won if that's what you think.
I've lost me, found me, and got lost some more;
but always regrouped when I fell to the floor.
Pain was found, hope was lost;
I never knew "love" had a cost.
Yet the fact remains that beauty has a curse,
but everyone sees the glory first.
My heart has found no "forever" remaining,
but the thought was always entertaining.
So just as truth always peeks through,
my one eye weeping will remain too.
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Copyright 2004 Soulseeker
Published on Wednesday, July 21, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "One Eye Weeping"
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On Friday, October 16, 2009, carlosjackal
(3011)
wrote:
Each couplet a gem, the whole piece a wonderful treasure.
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On Tuesday, November 23, 2004, Soulfire
(97) wrote:
Beautiful Soulseeker, just beautiful!
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On Sunday, October 3, 2004, FallenFaith
(44) wrote:
This is my favorite of yours so far. This poem has to have some of your true emotions mixed into it, it couldnt be just randomn writing. You are very talented, GO TO THE POET CONVENTION!
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A former member wrote:
Very illustrative and holds an astonishing emotional deepness to it
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A former member wrote:
My own eyes are green. Introspection never sleeps. I agree w/Lifeless here.
:-)
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On Friday, August 6, 2004, DarkWolf
(415) wrote:
"I've lost me, found me, and got lost some more..." I love this line. I really like the way you write, it's lovely. Thank you for sharing your works. -Michael
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On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, Lifeless
(39) wrote:
I liked your message here. Very strong and passionate too.
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On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
Nicely done. I like the content of your poems very much, although I think it would hit harder and be more intriguing if you let yourself give up AA BB CC rhyme schemes.
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On Tuesday, August 3, 2004, Dolly_Fatale
(29) wrote:
i adore the contrast in this...and adore it even more due to how much i can relate
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On Thursday, July 29, 2004, ONEANDLONELY
(117) wrote:
i llike your work ...you are talented...but...this piece is especially good...but...don't get me wrong...i read you
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On Thursday, July 29, 2004, Anth
(1133) wrote:
i really understood this one, i love how youve expressed more clearly this thought, excellent work
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A former member wrote:
love the metaphors, beautiful words...but maybe try some things that don't rhyme? you might find it easier to flow. great job none the less.
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A former member wrote:
I liked how you had the one weeping eye and the one open and fully aware eye...its very interesting.
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On Wednesday, July 21, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(354) wrote:
But other than that,this was a good piece...just maybe be a little more careful with the rhythm of your pieces...nice work..Butterfly..xxx...
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On Wednesday, July 21, 2004, Railway_Butterfly
(354) wrote:
To be honest,i'm not really a huge fan of rhyme...For rhyme to work well,in my opinon the flow has to be very strong,and I feel it was perhaps a little inconsistant in this piece...perhaps its just me...
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