The First Attempt

By SilentStalker

Darun Ferguson
Period 3
January 7, 1998


The Encounter


Imagine that you are an innocent person who happens to be walking to the closest store near your house when you witness a struggle. Someone is being mugged, and you feel you have to help. Just as you approach the situation, you notice that the suspect appears rather odd. His eyes glow with hatred, blood thirst, and even fear. In his right hand is a sharp, wooden object, with which he is attacking the victim. You rush to help the man being stabbed, but it appears that he has been dead for a while, due to his pale complexion. As the murderer notices you, he plunges the wooden weapon inside the corpse. He stands up and puts his hand in his right pocket, pulling out a powder that smells much like garlic. This powder he throws on the dead man. Then he runs off. When you finally step beside the corpse, it bursts into flames, forcing you to jump away quickly. Within seconds, all evidence of the crime is gone.

You contemplate the events of the night as you forego the store and decide to head back home. Suddenly you see the murderer, writhing on the ground not far from you. Something in his coat is harming him, and you see smoke coming from his right pocket. You realize that his coat is catching fire. Anguish and pain are fully visible on his face as he pleads you to help him remove his coat. You turn away in disgust, though, and continue home. Justice, you think to yourself, is done. The killer has killed himself.

However, the screaming stops abruptly, rather than dying down slowly. As you hear a cry of pain and anger from a distance behind you, you have an urge to speed up. You begin to accelerate when you hear footsteps--running--and they are getting closer. The fact that danger is present is all too noticeable. You run, faster and faster, and eventually reach a full sprint, but the footsteps are catching up. The footsteps are so close you can hear the source of them breathing.

Suddenly, an arm pushes you into the building beside you. As you turn around, you see that it is the murderer, but something is very different about him. Then you realize it--normal human beings do not have fangs. As you look into his cold, red, glowing eyes, you can see his dying human side

Almost instantly, he throws you from the building, and turns away. "Run," he says, his fists clenched so tightly that his own lifeblood is dripping off his fingers. "Run while you have the chance."

You run. You run all the way home.

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Copyright 2004 Darun Ferguson
Published on Wednesday, January 7, 1998.     Filed under: "Horror" and "Short Story"
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  • A former member wrote: Darun, this is just totally awesome.... I haven't read as much on here lately as I'd like to, but I keep coming back to your works... this kept my attention to the end..... awesome, awesome work!!

  • A former member wrote: Great work... You should write longer stories in chapters and post them. This one is amazing though.

  • Dilated View On Saturday, January 9, 2010, Dilated View (583)By person wrote:

    Killer story. Had me sucked in from the first lines and just kept me going the whole way through. Very much enjoyed.

  • A former member wrote: That was really good, i try making stories up like but can't seem to find the right words. it should be made into a 5 minute movie. would be great, and thats what i always thought of vampires, right up until the Twilight movie came out. Now, im not such a big fan of them. Great work though really got to me.

  • Vexed On Sunday, May 28, 2006, Vexed (74)By person wrote:

    wow....you had my heart racing....I haven't read very many short stories or novels that do that, at least none in a long time....

  • TheBardOfBlasphemy On Sunday, July 17, 2005, TheBardOfBlasphemy (358)By person wrote:

    yeh this is spooky. The pace of the action is well tuned... sort of speeds up to the climax. Wikked

  • Kinkypoptart On Monday, April 18, 2005, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    wow... I felt as if I were there. You have an awesome way of saying things that puts me right into the picture. ~*~Tart~*~

  • yslehc On Sunday, November 21, 2004, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    alskjda that gave me chills lol......

  • A former member wrote: ooh creepy. I wish it would have kept going. I love stories like this. Nice one ~serpentine~

  • A former member wrote: Very nice write. Im impressed.

  • Mistress Morbid On Friday, April 23, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    God damn that was chilling...and I love vampires. Well done ::applauds:: -Morb

  • murder_in_clubland On Friday, April 23, 2004, murder_in_clubland (388)By person wrote:

    wow..imguessing this is about vampires and such? very good i like it ~ss

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