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Ashy existence of a poor man
By Mistress Morbid
Thump thump thump
of your heartbeat
sends chills down my spine
as we lay here
chassis intertwined
I muse the wonders
wonders of you
wonders of us
A needle prick and flash
the facade of perfect
..v.a.n.i.s.h.e.s..
not two
but more
of us now lay here
hearing his heartbeat
no, his heart is laughing
at us
pointing and mocking
Pulling the mask away
I stab ferociously
at his satirical onyx heart
scarlet flows like a stream
down his soul
through his mane
around my feet and legs
and straight to my hands
I bask in your sanguine pond
of rigid {dreams} lies
I wouldn't hurt a fly,
would I......?
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Copyright 2004 Morbid Derangement
Published on Wednesday, April 21, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Ashy existence of a poor man"
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A former member wrote:
I really enjoyed the "dagger twist" of this poem... Started so sweetly, and then ended... not so much... An excellent piece.
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A former member wrote:
Would you? This is exquisite...I love the second stanze the best...it made the poem come alive.
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On Monday, May 10, 2004, Midnight Phoenix
(240)
wrote:
Wow, great setup and delivery. It leaves me feeling a tad bit insecure.
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On Sunday, April 25, 2004, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...exceptionally written...as twisted as it is, I enjoyed it...oh yeah, I only like twisted stuff...thanks for reminding me...you can take that knife out of my arm now...thank you... -Darun
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On Sunday, April 25, 2004, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...you, hurt a fly...? nah, you have more interesting things to maim...why waste it on a fly...? lol
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On Sunday, April 25, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
Lol, the whole point is to provoke thought....
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On Thursday, April 22, 2004, hopeless
(51) wrote:
oh my..... i cant use big words to describe this piece and the rest of your work like everyone else.... but all i can say is that this was scary and truly amazing.... ~hopeless
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Exodus
(172) wrote:
wow.....the colors did wonderous things to your words....very nice....i like alot..
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
wow - the change in emotion through each of the stanzas is excellently achieved; the use of the colour making it even more so. fine work indeed. :)
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
This essence of love, rotted and poisoned, like that well known faery tale snow white...the apple is a perfect depiction...Hurt, stab, cull the infedelity from this world...This place needs far more truth, honor and trust...
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Solace
(1069) wrote:
"Chassis" that is the crux of this for me, the comparing of humans to machinery...Epitomises this world...To rut like rabbits facelessly, to eat and plunder...humanity...
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, manywalks
(750) wrote:
Well, drop my drawers. Damn lady type person, this was absolutely perfect. Distrubing and utterly delicious. ~ mw
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
You seem to keep dropping your drawers...need help with them? lol
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A former member wrote:
Deliciously disturbing indeed. Try having an ice cream sandwhich instead, they're tasty:) This was scary-great. ~Ryan
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Lynaes
(859) wrote:
So deliciously disturbing! Rich with surrealism, I love the way your work always paints such stiking images! amazing work Morb, really astounding :) -L
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