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The Canvas
By SilencedAngel
cleaned up
yet uncleansed
all dolled up
yet a dirty whore
make me pretty i ask
make me pretty i beg
but the canvas
they have to work with
makes sucha simple take
completely impossible
no matter how skilled
the artist may be
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Copyright 2004 SilencedAngel
Published on Sunday, April 11, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Monday, April 12, 2004, sulkylime
(191)
wrote:
ho... what a fun piece.. i like the curt, bluff feel of this, and the thoughtful idea behind this.. the first three stanzas hit a chord, but i think you can do better on the last stanza. just my subjective two cents
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On Saturday, April 17, 2004, Jedi_MindFuck
(244) wrote:
i like this one also. i agree with sulky about the last stanza...for me,the 3rd line should be rethought. other than that...great write. ///Jedi\\\
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On Tuesday, April 13, 2004, SilencedAngel
(52) wrote:
Not sure how to change the last stanza so if you have any ideas, I would be grateful. And I like it when people point out how I can make my work better. Thanks. :)
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