memory

By darkangelXlll

as the days pass by i slowly begin to heal from the wounds you left once you decided to leave and tare me apart with your words. i remember i see it so clearly as you yelled and shouted to me i cried begging you to stop but you kept on going. i remember how you screamed and screamed it seemed like the world was ending and though you were shouting you had tears dripping down your checks. you where crying but why? was it because you loved me? or was it because you where leaving it all behind and you suddenly noticed all the pain you where enforcing? then you stop screaming and fall to the ground, your silently broken. all i see are your tears rapidly falling and hear you mumbling word. but what you mumbled i dont quit remember. but now your gone so whats the point. as i lie here in this cold white big room it all comes back to me its so clear almost as if i where living it again. i can see you, the room we where in our old house i can hear you it was so real it was frightening. then i here a knock on my door who could it be.



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Copyright 2004 darkangel13
Published on Saturday, March 20, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Malice In Wonderland On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    The pain and emotion in this tore my heart out...raw and to the point Kya Scholar

  • A_Puppet_Show On Saturday, September 18, 2004, A_Puppet_Show (166)By person wrote:

    fabulous

  • Munkey On Saturday, September 11, 2004, Munkey (79)By person wrote:

    to hell with speeliing is right... writing isn't about how the words are are presented but the emotions that they convay. LOVE,HATE,PAIN,JOY!!!THATS WHAT WRITING IS ABOUT!!! And you my dear touch me with what you write. Keep it dark. -Chance-

  • Moodswing On Wednesday, June 23, 2004, Moodswing (63)By person wrote:

    to hell with the spelling...its awesome work.....you spilled yourself terrifically

  • gracefullytorn On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, gracefullytorn (61)By person wrote:

    i couldnt get through this cuz the blistering spelling mistakes please fix them! no offense im wierd

  • Tracer On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Tracer (100)By person wrote:

    Quite a piece of work here, makes you think a lot more without all the punctuation and capitol letters. Really pushes the emotion on you...^vTracerv^ Scholar

  • manywalks On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    I like the frantic, frenetic flow; looking forward to watching you evolve. ~ mw

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    I'm not sure if the lack of capitalisation here was intentional or not, but either way, it worked! I had a very clear image of the scene and emotions you describe - such a heartbreaking image. Well done. Fox

  • ONEANDLONELY On Saturday, March 27, 2004, ONEANDLONELY (117)By person wrote:

    I was wondering what the memories of a fifteen year old could be. I still don't know.

  • manywalks On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    Ya know, like fox said, read it again, this time try either opening your eyes or taking that stick out of your...

  • flying_fox On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    perhaps you need to read this again? I'm not sure which part you don't understand. Fox

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Um...15 years of life probably.

  • A former member wrote: omg...this is really great!

  • DoctorAsh On Thursday, March 25, 2004, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    This is very well written. Except i have no idea what happened, let the mystery poke our curiosity buttons. For a writter at the age of 15 .. you have quite the future ahead of you. Wonderful piece. [D&A]

  • A former member wrote: Twisted and very rich with feeling...I love it. Your emotions are as powerful as your words.

  • capt_funguy On Sunday, March 21, 2004, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    i'm a sucker for the raw emotion well conveyed , like you hve here ... in rare cases ,,, i even dig the difficult structure , or rather ... the not so easy .. .. i liked it it pushed some honesty in my face ... funguy

  • Necromancer On Sunday, March 21, 2004, Necromancer (71)By person wrote:

    deep and full of emotion i love it ~Necro(Justin)

  • A former member wrote: Kind of a rush of twisted thoughts... Just love that ending, very clever! ~Wish Upon A Star

  • Anth On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    i like this, its like im in your head reading your questioning thoughts as they come to you, you have immense skill and your poetry is totally absorbing and brilliant

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