"you"

By darkangelXlll

you can not hear the deep thoughts in my mind,
you can not feel the cold knife against my wan skin as i sit here and try this over and over again till i get it right
you can not see the warm red blood as it slowly drips from within as it slowly falls and stains the floor washable stains but yet permanit to me these stains stay and ground themselves so deep inside it's like an eternal memory
you can perfectly hear the lies of "im doing fine" "im ok" yeah all of those were lies hard to belive right?
you can only feel my cold heart my cold empty heart.
you can only see the scars starting to fade away all the pain slowly "going away" what makes you think that everything is ok and that ill be fine.

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Copyright 2004 darkangel13
Published on Saturday, March 20, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A_Puppet_Show On Saturday, September 18, 2004, A_Puppet_Show (166)By person wrote:

    I do not find it boring, neither do I stand intrigued like I did with an ealier writing of yours. But you should choose not to listen to me when I comment on "you poems"

  • A_Puppet_Show On Saturday, September 18, 2004, A_Puppet_Show (166)By person wrote:

    I dislike them befor reading them, and the more you's the worse for me. Still it seemed real enough.

  • Munkey On Tuesday, August 17, 2004, Munkey (79)By person wrote:

    Wow, that as deep as it gets. Thank you for sharing such deep thoughts -Munkey-

  • A former member wrote: I feel what you're saying. It's like they're stuck in they're own little world and can't even realize something is wrong no matter what you tell them or do they never seem to notice until it's too late.

  • A former member wrote: The pain that you feel is the start or the end of it all, You felt much worse when you were forced into the cold world, but you have forgotten.

  • A former member wrote: Remember that day, pain giving life, and this day with life giving pain. The circle of life is not complete in just that tiny piece.

  • A former member wrote: The world feels your sorrow and weeps for you too. The world laughs and cries out in triumph, you should shout in joy for it.

  • Alanarchy On Saturday, March 27, 2004, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    This is very sad. You have a great heart. Thanks for talking to me. I agree with tim. Hang in there. You've made a friend, here.

  • A former member wrote: this is good...like really really really great

  • Clementine On Friday, March 26, 2004, Clementine (121)By person wrote:

    'Next please.....wishy washy, non-intresting, prepubesant...unless you dont care...write something to capture us, this just dulls my brain.

  • A former member wrote: amazing, as a fellow past cutter i can totally relate

  • A former member wrote: It wasn't just another cutter poem. It was something much more...I'm with the others. Marvelous.

  • capt_funguy On Sunday, March 21, 2004, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    cool , another heartfelt write ... " these stains stay and ground themselves so deep inside it's like an eternal memory" this was a killer ... i dug this very much ... funguy

  • Necromancer On Sunday, March 21, 2004, Necromancer (71)By person wrote:

    awsome i can relate to it perfectly -reaks of awsomeness- ~Necro(Justin)

  • K_Love On Saturday, March 20, 2004, K_Love (525)By person wrote:

    I know these feelings, and I know these questions... Have you went inside my brain or something?? lol... anywayz I love this, passionate and wondering ~Kirsten~

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