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A dying mind
By nightshade
Everything in life is a choice
By choosing right or wrong you give it a voice
You say it wasn’t an option you can’t control what you do
always hurting those closest to you
There were unhallowed secrets you wished to preserve
She loved you more than you could ever deserve
Making another person start over again
You turned from your lover to her best friend
Watching behind you cringing at every sound
How could you presume that you wouldn’t be found
You’ve finally shut the last door
Blood spilt upon the floor
You think of all you must leave behind
As Darkness envelopes the dying mind
**I actually wrote this one starting from the last vers to the first**
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Copyright 2004 nightshade
Published on Monday, March 1, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Tuesday, December 6, 2016, carlosjackal
(3011)
wrote:
This reads like a great lesson in love, one we can all learn from when we gradually fall out of love with someone. Very good work.
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On Friday, November 18, 2016, 10 Forty Three
(593) wrote:
Why had I not read this until now? I read it from end to beginning and then from beginning to end. That is very impressive. Well done! - 10:43
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On Wednesday, September 15, 2010, Ashteroth
(192) wrote:
Interesting, must try this style myself. I the concept of giving these things a voice like it is neutral and inanimate before we poor our will into it ~Ash
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A former member wrote:
no doubt a palindrome poem! bravo!! I read it bottom up, and then I slowly let my mouth feel the words from the top down.... yummy
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On Monday, May 10, 2004, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
Last verse to the first... I admire your creativity. This turned out very well all the way from the end to the beginning.
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On Saturday, March 20, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
An impressive feat in technicality...combined with the truthful and contemplative feel to this piece..all in all it makes it amazing in every angle...-l-
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On Wednesday, March 17, 2004, finaldestiny
(74) wrote:
wow that was an impressive piece there, it actually made me think which i have to say is amazing. then I read it backwards and it was just as good lol.The Last line says so much in few words. nice write ~finaldestiny~
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On Saturday, March 13, 2004, nell
(271) wrote:
this was wicked and when i read it bottom to top it's even better=P
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On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, knightmirror
(426) wrote:
beautiful write.i felt everything you wrote cause i hurt someone i loved very much and now i'm alone.**** knight
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On Sunday, September 19, 2010, nightshade
(120) wrote:
no knight we are never alone and neither are you talk to me anytime you need ~night~
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On Wednesday, March 3, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
I agree with pessum, impressive for a poem to sound right forward or backwards.
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On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, pessum ire animus
(57) wrote:
whoa... that was amazing... just read it backwards after forwards... cant say many people can do that. fucking awesome.
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On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
Hey this was pretty cool.. I read it forward, backwards, sidewards...errmm. delicious every way. :) :::OLd
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On Monday, March 1, 2004, PointlessX
(36) wrote:
"..She loved you more than you could ever deserve.." --more than just a great write!!--PointlessX
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On Monday, March 1, 2004, Drea
(1443) wrote:
i really like this. the flow is done well. the words speak volumes. wonderful. ~Drea~
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A former member wrote:
The story you conjure is relevant to everyone in some way and mine in many. Another thing I must add is that you acheived making the aa bb cc dd rhyme scheme work amazingly and not seem boring, big kudos on that.
+T.P.U+
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A former member wrote:
Very nicely done. I like it. The last verse is my favorite.
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