preview of the path our dialogue will take

By KittyStryker




you can
see
the words
stumbling down
speech
tumbling
over
lips chapped
and bleeding
from the way
we kiss
each
other

close
call

almost
found
res

o

lu

tion






our lies
trip along
in twos
and threes
ever increasing
families







the truth
marches
forth
in fearsome
lonely
ones

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Copyright 2004 Bast
Published on Sunday, February 29, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • purr_verse On Wednesday, July 28, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    gods - awesome, chilling truth/power throughout this... excellently effective write... and i could almost hear a deathknell steady solitary drumbeat emphasising every syllable of that last stanza.

  • Sky Singer On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, Sky Singer (153)By person wrote:

    i also agree, the format is wonderful. excellent poem, kitty.

  • Dayer On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    my thoughts exactly

  • Emptyness Inside Me On Monday, March 1, 2004, Emptyness Inside Me (171)By person wrote:

    nice emotional piece here, great wording and structure, i like how you made it to where i can almost visualize it, good job ~Emptyness~

  • Solace On Monday, March 1, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    I hung on each word like lichen to a rock, clinging in desperation for that conclusion, resolution if you will, you didn't dissapoint :)

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Monday, March 1, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    very nice structuring...awesome piece with its atmosphere of wonder...always a pleasure to read your thoughts...-l-

  • Alanarchy On Sunday, February 29, 2004, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    I really liked the format of this piece. Like a stream of subconcious thoughts. But the content is what really blew me away. Write on.

  • suicideseason On Sunday, February 29, 2004, suicideseason (1639)By person wrote:

    *nods*...i agree,Mike.the format is superb.and the emotion is overwhelming.i could quote this in it's completeness...but i'll just fave it instead.-tim


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