Domino Effect

By hate_doll

It's been awhile
Since I've seen you
Without the sugar-coated
Curtains you use
To hide the dusty corners
You are too afraid to clean

You use a mask of decadence
To hide your fleeting esteem
Hairspray and eyeliner
Are the main components
Of your character

You say you've purged yourself
You are clean of individuality
You have sold your soul
For a shiny new self

I'm sorry I had to watch
Your deterioration
From free-spirited lovechild
To a prisoner of whorish cliches

I never thought
It would get so bad

But like dominoes
We all fall sometime
And in the shadow of defeat
We bring those close to us

It is nothing personal
It was just your time to fall

But I will not be the one
In front of you
Waiting for my turn
To hit the floor

...whytt*04

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Copyright 2004 hate_doll
Published on Thursday, February 12, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: "You use a mask of decadence To hide your fleeting esteem"...once a person has self-reflected, he can now be a "free-spirited lovechild"...beautifully wriiten.

  • A former member wrote: I had a friend like that.. we don't really talk much anymore.. very beautiful..

  • Emptyness Inside Me On Friday, February 20, 2004, Emptyness Inside Me (171)By person wrote:

    as always with you, excellent write, good job ~Emptyness~

  • flying_fox On Friday, February 20, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    this is fantastic...great analogy and lovely flow. very heartfelt words. FF

  • purr_verse On Friday, February 13, 2004, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    i completely agree with Fish on this one. great stuff. purr

  • A former member wrote: I love looking at the world through other peoples eyes. Great imagery, excellent poem. U.P.

  • Six-Out On Thursday, February 12, 2004, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Good god Hate-ie, you don't post for a while, then you're back with the likes of this. Great write. As always, I'm not disappointed in reading you.

  • capt_funguy On Thursday, February 12, 2004, capt_funguy (778)By person wrote:

    great just great ... keep those dominoes in front of you and keep a safe distance .. watch them fall .... very nice .. funguy

  • LovedByAMiracle On Thursday, February 12, 2004, LovedByAMiracle (51)By person wrote:

    i like the symbolism. this truly is sad, i really enjoyed it, great job:)

  • Jonas On Thursday, February 12, 2004, Jonas (720)By person wrote:

    thematically: interesting, but the reason i'm commenting is because you make stellar use of the english language... the images and metaphor in the first half of the poem are most excellent

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