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minus eloquence
By red_haze
i write you in ink,
stain my hands with your name,
callus my fingers
with the effort to unburden.
and sometimes,
i just sit quietly,
wishing i had the words...
but my muse laughs,
and tells me: 'it's but a dream'.
and my hands begin to shake...
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Copyright 2004 red_haze
Published on Wednesday, February 4, 2004.
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On Monday, April 30, 2018, Alchemist
(688)
wrote:
Dreams of a muse. Somber and precise.
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On Monday, April 30, 2018, Smiles
(55) wrote:
So much conveyed in a few short lines. Fantastic writing
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On Sunday, February 26, 2006, Sin
(1168) wrote:
captivating from the title to the end.. wonderful write ~kristy
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On Monday, April 27, 2009, Sin
(1168) wrote:
i still love this
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On Friday, August 12, 2005, blue
(1454) wrote:
I've nothing of worth to say to this.. truly remarkable! hmm, is that a contradiction? er well, most enjoyed all the same :) ~b
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On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict
(45) wrote:
it can be a thin line, at times, to differentiate between dream and reality (more so, even, when it is just the dream we would have as our reality).
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On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict
(45) wrote:
still, reality is only relative... and it could be argued that, in affecting the creation of such poetry as this, said dreams take on a reality all their own.
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On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict
(45) wrote:
-hence, i assume, the shaking of the hands... the uncertainty associated with such passions, and the cruel accompanying idea that our reality may also be dream.
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A former member wrote:
sometimes i feel the same way, and u jus express it so well with so much talent.
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
Gotta love when the title makes the poem. I like the part about the muse calling it a dream, too. Overall, and as always, excellent work. Feed me more!
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On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze
(52) wrote:
you are always too nice to me.
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
fabulous - conveys so much with so few words. FF
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On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze
(52) wrote:
your kindness is very much appreciated.
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
marvellous, with a beautifully powerful conclusive line. i love it. purr
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On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze
(52) wrote:
thanks. and i thought this felt.. incomplete.
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A former member wrote:
Second line first verse...well done. +T.P.U+
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, red_haze
(52) wrote:
thank you. :)
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, manicheism
(43) wrote:
i really love you work and style, although i can't find the words to properly commend it. keep it up.
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On Thursday, February 5, 2004, yslehc
(334) wrote:
oo cool.. i like your style very much too.. it's .. weird in a way
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On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, red_haze
(52) wrote:
i'm quite inarticulate, so again... thank you for your wonderful comments.
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
While I'm on the compliment rampage, I should mention that you're as about inarticulate as the child of a dictionary and encyclopedia.
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