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Framed form Of you
By maddin foxxxy
I carry
this picture
so well preserved
of your face
lighting up
the dark of the day...
No one could
ever tell that
somehow you've let
everything
fade up
in change...
You photographed
yourself as this
free being
misunderstood
inside
thrown
by the tides...
And you smiled
like a child
But cursed
like a man
I was wasting my view
in closing my eyes...
I know I'll
see you again
and try to unWraP
the layers
you hide...
I know I'll be
thinking in where
and how and when
I'd let go
of I...
I'll be using my view
to open my eyes...
And you'll appear
as cristal clear
just as you were
last time
today
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Copyright 2004 maddin foxxxy
Published on Tuesday, January 20, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "Framed form Of you"
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On Wednesday, February 18, 2004, flying_fox
(573)
wrote:
By the way, I think you are beautiful - what a lovely smile and gorgeous skin. FF
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On Wednesday, February 18, 2004, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
I think this is wonderful. The flow is sublime. It left me with a feeling of sad serenity. I particularly like the stanza "And you smiled like a child But cursed like a man"...for a reason I can't explain this really got to me. thank you. FF
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On Saturday, January 24, 2004, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
I wish you would have kept the original version on here for us. I feel like I'm missing an emotion or a thought that added to this wonderful piece. The beauty you've found is desired by so many of the jealous eyes reading this art.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
Yes, very beautiful and S_F is very good at what he does. S.
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On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, OLd SouL
(732) wrote:
:) *shakes head* You are something else. :::OLd
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On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, girlafraid
(480) wrote:
i didn't read the other version...but i love it the way it is
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On Tuesday, January 20, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti
(341) wrote:
this is such a humble piece...but i have to say the last stanza was unneeded, with the 'fucked' word....this poem was perfect if you ended on 'today'...that word just has no place in such an honest and sweet poem...-l-
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On Tuesday, January 20, 2004, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
thanks 4 the tip
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On Tuesday, January 20, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
I guess you altered this since Spiritus commented... it certainly reads beautifully as it stands now... lovely work. purr
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