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Obscure Ramblings On Love
By Drifter
And the fifth note sets her off
Journey of a screaming tear
Holding to the gentle contour of her face
Loving every fine blond hair
To give a salty wet kiss
Manic Melody Massages My Mind's Mangled Mess
Flooding my head with dreams and my foot with motion
Struggling to define my euphoria
Marijuana hangs dryly in the air
A crying girl touched
By the music that defines her life
And there we are, sharing the same tear
My Saturday Night Hypothesis:
Life exists in the stare
Between 2 soon to be lovers
And the beat that surrounds them
Hanging in the air like the soon discarded inhibitions
A smile shatters my mellow-dramatics
It battles its weight in sobriety
Chemicals race in my veins
I am addicted without remorse
In this moment
At this verse
In this room
With this girl
I Am
I can breath easily as we move
Every pain sloughs away in the moonlight
As I confess my way home
To a stranger known to well
Praying to surpass loneliness again
Passion annexes the atmosphere
Memory fades when the heat rises
And I wake up as I belong
Panting softly at the sky
Resting next to one who can see through me
Naked and unafraid
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Copyright 2003 RabidDrone
Published on Sunday, December 28, 2003.
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Comments on "Obscure Ramblings On Love"
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A former member wrote:
This is so different, the way its written is very unique, it takes my breath away. this is definitely one of my favorites
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A former member wrote:
stunning depth of awareness, that blur between madness and sobriety.. and this contentment of just be.ing. amazed.
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A former member wrote:
I have to comment again to state that I simply love "In this moment; At this verse; In this room; With this girl;
I Am"
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On Monday, January 19, 2004, no_independence
(19)
wrote:
HOLY SHIT BRO!!! Awesome! you really do like her don't you (yes I know who its about)!
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On Tuesday, January 20, 2004, Drifter
(268) wrote:
I was very drunk when i wrote this the first time. It was meant to describe the night i was having. She just dominated my thoughts at the time. Yes though, i do like her :)
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On Monday, December 29, 2003, pushblood
(27) wrote:
Incredible....I loved it.. Each line over came the next so beautifully...left awestricken....Thanks for posting....~P.B~
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A former member wrote:
Well...just let me pick my jaw up off of the floor. This just completely smacked me in the face. I love it. This is definately going to favorites.
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On Monday, December 29, 2003, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
The opening line is brilliant - the immediacy just great, original and compelling. "mellow-dramatics" is also most impressive! nice stuff. purr (irritating critique: "annex's" should be "annexes". sorry.)
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On Sunday, December 28, 2003, Exodus
(172) wrote:
Wow....This was a rush of words....I particularly like the last two lines...its ends it very well....good stuff..
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A former member wrote:
addiction...deep shit..good shit. keep writing._-=Evil=-_
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A former member wrote:
you have a wa with words.. keep writing.
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