Pen and Drink

By purr_verse

The room is spinning and the wine is sweet
Little bubbles dance-dancing to my blast-heart-beat
With your words on the wall
and Perignon on my lips
Fermented gold apocalypse
My man of the hour
is always 3am
as the music throbs a pounding pulse of what-why-when
I might have had a point
but I forget
I bet
this won't make sense but nevertheless
with intoxicated rhythms
and syllabic distress
I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenness
I really think that I should think
a little bit less
of you
This world should have come with a warning.

I shout! I scream!
I die! I dream!
I want! I think!
I'll have! Another drink!
The sun's coming up on my mourning.

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Copyright 2003 Natalie Mills Lyndon
Published on Saturday, December 20, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • BloodyMercy On Wednesday, February 5, 2014, BloodyMercy (64)By person wrote:

    I have no idea what makes me enjoy this one so much, but it is a fantastic read - I can't say I relate... but since this one popped up I haven't been able to let it go!!! Great writing!!

  • A former member wrote: this write makes my head spin..just the way it flows, forces me to read it rather quickly..then i feel a bit dizzy at the end, euphoric but aware at the same time. i just..love this. i keep coming back to it today, just to read and read over and over.

  • A former member wrote: today isn't my first time reading this..but i guess it's the first time reading this coherently enough to form a comment that semi makes sense..heh..theres just so much i adore in this. it's like..whimsical with a touch of sadness..

  • A former member wrote: the last line kinda makes me think sadness..and "this world should have come with a warning". but then the exclamation parts just make me sort of happy for some reason. like, i just want to go around yelling "I'll have! Another drink!"

  • A former member wrote: i kinda want to sing this in my head..and maybe i will..it just seems like this has to be made into a song. i just can't stop repeating those last few lines in my head. just..perfect. completely. ~bethany

  • A former member wrote: the last line grabs the whole poem by the balls. gina

  • A former member wrote: "The sun's coming up on my mourning." Fabulous line. Another awesome poem, Purr.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    This was quickly done with... and it left a pulse, familiar... *looks around thinking* nice one purr.. your absolutly gifted.

  • girlafraid On Saturday, April 3, 2004, girlafraid (480)By person wrote:

    for some reason the end made me smile...and i liked it...*afraid*

  • sulkylime On Thursday, March 11, 2004, sulkylime (191)By person wrote:

    this is GREAT- i really like how you structured this and your rhyme scheme, and about your drunken genius contents.. well, i'm just about intoxicated only by reading this. lovely! --lime

  • Solace On Thursday, February 26, 2004, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    I might have had a point but i forget...story of my life...

  • Tracer On Thursday, December 25, 2003, Tracer (100)By person wrote:

    I agree, this does give the image of a drunken, depressed stupor (if that word isn't getting old yet)...^vTracerv^ Scholar

  • A former member wrote: My man of the hour is always 3am... a greats poets line... I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenness...and this Scholar

  • A former member wrote: my choice would be a nice pinot chardonnay Scholar

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Wednesday, December 24, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    beautiful piece...accurately depicts a drunken and depressed stupor, which makes you feel intoxicated by the time the poem ends......once again, i bow to you....

  • A former member wrote: 'this won't make sense but nevertheless with intoxicated rhythms' I now feel like i'm coming down the mountain...just because it's what the apocalypse ferments...SPlendid poem AGAIN!, the moon is falling down on my grace.

  • A former member wrote: Yep...so I'm another fan of "this world should come with a warning" Excellent line. I love drunken stupor poems :)

  • maddin foxxxy On Sunday, December 21, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358)By person wrote:

    I really can describe how this resembles my thinkin'....."this world should have come with a warning"....this absolutely one favorite from you.

  • Jadednoir On Sunday, December 21, 2003, Jadednoir (28)By person wrote:

    Wow! you remind me soooo fucking much of what it is like to write while intoxicated....lovely doll. "Fermented gold apocalypse...this won't make sense but nevertheless" great lines

  • Armand On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Armand (57)By person wrote:

    this new year's eve, Robert Burns should be forgotten and we should raise a cup of kindness yet and recite your closing lines... what an amazing talent you are, purr.

  • shadowsinthelight On Friday, January 23, 2004, shadowsinthelight (146)By person wrote:

    Armand has replaced me! I humbly prostrate myself at your feet, my crimson Queen of quintessential prose. Damn, you are good! S. ;)

  • Drifter On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Drifter (268)By person wrote:

    i love writing drunk... but i always fall asleeeeeeeeeee

  • Drea On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    "This world should have come with a warning." i love that line. this is a fantasic write and read. the last line nails it home.. ~Drea~

  • suicideseason On Sunday, December 21, 2003, suicideseason (1639)By person wrote:

    i agree with Drea.the ending really does the trick.awesome drunken-style!~season

  • A former member wrote: it has a slurred intensity, as in a dream and while reading it i began to hear the roaring sound of an ocean of voices and i got the image of blurred ballroom dancing, all very surreal. i esp liked this part: "I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenn

  • A former member wrote: ...ess" lol didn't quite make it there ^_^


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