painting

By Jonas

i feel invisible
and your eyes are like two
green crescent moons
dangling like apples
or ivy from the trellis of the stars
roseline!!!
christ! i can't hope to escape cliche in
this
escapade
temper tantrum
crying cryptic tirade

where do i place my head
how do i begin to learn to deny this yearning
to reconcile algebra and art
the mind and the heart
this
this is bullshit
i dance in the eyes of a painting on display
in the window
during a banal small town opening
out in the rain that more hangs
lurid on the air
and it sticks to your skin
it leaves you wet without the benefit of a downpour

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Copyright 2003 Fish
Published on Friday, December 19, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Sunday, July 17, 2016, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    Gargantuan heart, soul and feeling resonating through this from top to bottom. .Wonderful work of art.

  • A former member wrote: what a great piece. you have an incredible way of really capturing the visual stimulation that is so essential in producing amazing poetry...GoLDeNLoTuS

  • liquid_emotion On Saturday, January 3, 2004, liquid_emotion (323)By person wrote:

    art

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, December 30, 2003, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    love the imagery of the first verse. Really took to the whole thing in general. Your style is unique and appreciated. :::OLd

  • Stranger On Tuesday, December 30, 2003, Stranger (264)By person wrote:

    The visual in the first four lines is perfect. It is one of the most beautiful, tangible images I have ever had conjured in my mind.

  • purr_verse On Monday, December 22, 2003, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    great in general, but i absolutely love the closing line. fabulous. purr

  • Methos On Friday, December 19, 2003, Methos (121)By person wrote:

    "i dance in the eyes of a painting on display"..Amazing, i love your writing. -Methos

  • urbanhumility On Friday, December 19, 2003, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    a moving piece , to move you.....well done pescado....urban

  • A former member wrote: Hi hun, I really like this work..It's very beautiful

  • A former member wrote: Your writing leaves me speachless everytime! I love your work.

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