the origin

By urbanhumility

It was in a "Creators" wish;

It was what saved you from
an Atheist hell..........

In whole, your essence...

Time played, Time glanced upon;
Times wilted promise....

The "water" that i drink;
The salt from my tears;

The "begining" that comes forth;
With the intensity of a firery sun-

Fail again,

There it has always "been"....


my "will"

my "origin............

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Copyright 2003 urbanhumility
Published on Saturday, November 22, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • bpathos On Friday, December 8, 2017, bpathos (90)By person wrote:

    This makes me think... about God. What better gift is there to us all. Thank you.

  • MegannVidal On Tuesday, June 22, 2010, MegannVidal (106)By person wrote:

    Alot of people write poetry because they're self absorbed and they write about such frivolous things, people in general live their lives with this dry meaning and blank perception. I really respect that you take a deeper look into things and have passion for things like humanity and religion. I try my best to come as close as possible to write about the exact emotion that went through my head at the time of the event. Emotions are mainly what I write about because I've experienced so many of them it would be a shame to forget a single one even if it was miserably.

  • ANGELSLAYER On Monday, March 15, 2010, ANGELSLAYER (151)By person wrote:

    you seem to have rendered many speechless, and with good reason! As I have been struck dumb as well. nicely done

  • waterchica999 On Sunday, July 23, 2006, waterchica999 (30)By person wrote:

    I like your work its beautifully woven together

  • TaintedButterfly On Tuesday, February 14, 2006, TaintedButterfly (675)By person wrote:

    Oh my... I really have no words to give you, for this has rendered me without.

  • A former member wrote: isn't it strange that such few words can tell a story??

  • sIo On Friday, December 31, 2004, sIo (887)By person wrote:

    *bows* you are the master....this kicked ass, the ending was superbly placed and. great job!

  • blue On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, blue (1457)By person wrote:

    I agree, so great...I can't come up with anything to reflect such vision! ~b

  • liquid_emotion On Saturday, July 24, 2004, liquid_emotion (356)By person wrote:

    More depressing than the actual reality of it...

  • A former member wrote: FUCK, do I know you? Why are we resonating at the same speed? I have a few like this, they search for the same. I feel like a puss, this piece almost made me cry, honest. -END-

  • sixsixnine On Monday, June 7, 2004, sixsixnine (486)By person wrote:

    It's strange how in such few words meanings become endless in this piece *a most excellent piece* ~669~

  • A former member wrote: Well written, excellent poem...I love your use of quotation sets the piece alive.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Tuesday, December 16, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    Blib.. this made me think. thanks for writing and posting this dude..

  • Mr King On Wednesday, November 26, 2003, Mr King (548)By person wrote:

    yes!!! makes me smile! awesome... inspiring... mind and heart opening... rise my brother... rise... 1love2us

  • Mr King On Wednesday, November 26, 2003, Mr King (548)By person wrote:

    the paradox of the Creator and the Self... which is which or are they one and the same? ... not an ego thing... a Love thang.

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Saturday, November 22, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti (343)By person wrote:

    a perplexing could be talking about the "origin" of many things...god, nature, soul, will, time....maybe it is all of them combined...i don't know....very good write...-l-

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