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Revelation
By Spiritus_Frumenti
While the overcast of a lucid moon
Awakens a dark and a weeping
While the silver knife carves a wound,
By whose will are you really bleeding?
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Those that stand watching
The drips interrupting the silence
Long lost in the moment
Passing by like nothing has happened
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My God, is it just me?
Is it just my eyes that deceive
The wisdom from which I seek
And devoid of it all
Through an error in perception
Or a flaw from your world?
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My God, can?t you feel?
How the life streams from the veins
Of those unfortunate ones
That just want to find,
A place from where to begin....?
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Copyright 2003 Juan A. Thomas
Published on Tuesday, August 10, 2021.
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On Sunday, October 13, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(700)
wrote:
very beautiful work. I will endeavor to read more. :)
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On Saturday, April 19, 2008, Mari
(425) wrote:
Every time I read you, you blow my mind, then I kind of stare dumbly comprehending everything I've just read, and it's all beautiful too. Every.Single. Word.
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On Tuesday, August 15, 2006, torn_beauty
(77) wrote:
nicely done! it flows so well, like a living stream of words.
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A former member wrote:
amazing. this peom speaks in great volumes to me. it seems there is no place in this world where you can live the lie you want in peace. ....-samone
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On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
toxic in it's addiction...sick write
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On Sunday, August 28, 2005, abattoir
(115) wrote:
is it then in the loss of blood that one can truely be reborn? in the bodies fight for replacement, is something spiritual reincarnated?rendered wondering.
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A former member wrote:
Hauntingly beautiful. The imagery is so vulnerable, yet so sharp, piercing. "By whose will are you really bleeding" . . a mesmeric, thought-provoking write. Excellence..
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On Tuesday, October 12, 2004, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
your cadence of words take me into a daze of intricate and delicate thought........your depth is matched with your height........well done..........urban
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A former member wrote:
"...those unfortunate ones that just want to find, a place from where to being..." So terribly resonant. Beautiful.
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
"My God, can?t you feel?" ... I have often found myself asking the same. "Why can't you see" ... Meaning the same. I think it is more of a static question. Once you ask it, it becomes a thing to live with, or/and die. I do not think it too morbid to say.
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
The theme is universal in suffering, it(the feeling) can be applied to any situation of human behavior where backs are turned. Or eyes closed of all kinds of reasons. The feeling is the same. I applaud you for conveying it so well. -Nadir-
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A former member wrote:
Wow..very powerful words, I really enjoyed reading this.awsome write. ~wicked~
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On Sunday, January 18, 2004, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
Hmm... I'm deathly tired of cutting. I like the title, though, and you definitely have talent in style and structure.
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
It is hard to take a person serious that day after day comment about style and structure, while not being clear on why he like a simple word in his comment. If it is the context to the poem or just the word itself.
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
Originality, shallowness and style. These are subjects that should be touched with care, and certainly go both ways when being a reader to a writer, or writer to a reader.
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On Saturday, August 28, 2004, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
You sir, certainly do not wield the ability of giving what you request in one of these ways. If you do in the other is not yet known to me. I am sorry to write this here, but this has annoyed me. -Nadir
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On Tuesday, November 25, 2003, SnowQueen
(59) wrote:
This painted many pictures in my mind, I really enjoyed it. Beautiful poem, keep it up...
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On Friday, November 21, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(235) wrote:
breath taking...you words ring like an echo lingering as it fades into my soul+Fallen One+
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On Thursday, November 20, 2003, Mr King
(547) wrote:
Deep feelings and ideas you bring up here... of God and fate... of human suffering and from where it comes?... of human suffering and of those whom in their separated inability to empathize with their fellow human beings are passers bye "like nothing has
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On Monday, December 8, 2003, Mr King
(547) wrote:
happened"
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A former member wrote:
Yes, very interesting indeed. My God, can't you feel? You have excellent lines in your poetry...
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On Saturday, November 1, 2003, Bloody_Hands
(20) wrote:
And interisting write you have, I'm not sure what to think. ~Lynne
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