By Roxxi

Guitar strings shape his veins
Supple leather forms his skin
Thirteenth stepping is very simple here
Blue marbles set his eyes
White silk flows his hair

You cloud my mind with vapor
Take away my power to refuse
I'll happily let you make a fool of me

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Copyright 2018 Roxxi
Published on Monday, December 31, 2018.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"
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  • Jonas Robinson On Friday, February 15, 2019, Jonas Robinson (844)By person wrote:

    Wow, that's hard. It's good to feel some relief with words. I like this because of the word flow and a particular feel of vocabulary which you brought to this one. :)

  • Phalanx On Monday, February 11, 2019, Phalanx (516)By person wrote:

    That was really nice. I like the imagery and the longing I felt in this. Very nice work.

  • bpathos On Friday, January 4, 2019, bpathos (90)By person wrote:

    Howdy, recovery is better than no recovery. Truly, I wish you the best. Welcome to DP. Writing is good for the writer and reader. Thank you.

  • Sorrowful Jester On Tuesday, January 1, 2019, Sorrowful Jester (67)By person wrote:

    And one last thing. DO NOT add verses just as filler in series. Don't ruin a good poem, if you don't have more good ideas by adding mediocre verses to make it longer. I do it sometimes, and I hate myself for doing it. Good job!

  • Roxxi On Tuesday, January 1, 2019, Roxxi (23)By person wrote:

    Thank you so much for your help and tips. You are very kind.

  • Sorrowful Jester On Tuesday, January 1, 2019, Sorrowful Jester (67)By person wrote:

    I'll bookmark this one so that I re-read it later, because I'm in no condition (in my opinion) of judging poetry. So I could give you my opinion on it --more constructive critique that just "I liked it". That is if you'd like to, I've been looking for one but I only criticism that contains no arguments or reasoning especially for the little things (why you chose this word instead of that word, et cetera). Surely, I guess that even "I love it" / "I hate it" type of comments help. Also trying to interpret you work is a sign that someone really read it, but they don't help me as much as the critique I'm looking for.

  • Sorrowful Jester On Tuesday, January 1, 2019, Sorrowful Jester (67)By person wrote:

    Thank you for sharing a poem full of metaphors / symbolisms with us. A lot of us have been there, and this one brings feeling and memories in mind better than pictures / videos / et cetera. I wish EVERYONE (including you, your family / friends / et cetera) a happy new year. May all of your wishes come true (be it health, true love, true happiness, et cetera). Just keep in mind that money / fortune is not the means of acquiring those, but could be used as; tool to acquire them. We seek fortune only in favor something else, because fortune will not bring us any goods by itself, but only when using it --whether is it for the support of the body, or of any other similar reason. Now, the highest good is sought for it's sake and not for the sake of something else. So this essentially means that fortune is not the highest good of humans.

  • Roxxi On Monday, December 31, 2018, Roxxi (23)By person wrote:

    Thank you for your helpful advice. I'm working on expanding this but unfortunately it's a slow crawl. I'll keep adding to it as time marches on.

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