Please untie me

By Jonas Robinson

The torment is crawling all over my skin
I don't know why I let this spider on me to begin
"But if you keep on crying, he'll spend his life in sin
So just wait a couple hours and drown and do not win"

Deadly flowers in the feild of where I swim
Alas I fall asleep but he's aiming at my skin
If he won't drown himself I might begin to scream
Because the next Hell after Hell is going to be the next painful bight again

Cross your arms
Cross your legs

Alas, the spider eats my skin
For his only savage purpose is to get himself some din
All I know is I'm floating and the feild is flooded from within
Crawling in the circle of another man's chin

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Copyright 2018 Jonas Robinson
Published on Monday, December 3, 2018.     Filed under: "Poetry"

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  • sTr8-jAcKeT On Monday, March 25, 2019, sTr8-jAcKeT (735)By person wrote:

    "Uh, yeah... Hey sTr8, don't forget to pickup chips for the party. Oh & you still owe me $5 bucks ya' bastard!"

  • Jonas Robinson On Tuesday, March 26, 2019, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    I'll pay you back by also buying the dip.

  • sTr8-jAcKeT On Tuesday, March 26, 2019, sTr8-jAcKeT (735)By person wrote:

    Haha, good sport Jonas! Had to leave myself a message! Good work though my man.

  • dwells On Friday, December 7, 2018, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    The itsy-bitsy spider went up the water spout...but I digress JR. This was a simile I believe, to an addictive craving that needs to be scratched or smooshed perhaps. Very creative imagery and hoping it's not the same brown recluse that got me (seriously) Cheers my friend! - Dan

  • Jonas Robinson On Saturday, December 8, 2018, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    Thank you for the sympathy. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery, that's one thing I put in effort into this one. :)

  • sTr8-jAcKeT On Friday, December 7, 2018, sTr8-jAcKeT (735)By person wrote:

    K... Hey sTr8, we have to go the store today; don't forget milk, eggs, potatoes & dog fud (that's how dogs spell it.) There, left myself a message. On a serious note, this is probably my favorite piece of yours so far brother. Idk why the spiders image is so awesome in my head from this: runic glowing tattoo-like tribal lines going up it's legs & joining on the body. That's what I get from this, thanks my man. Loved theis poem, keep it up.

  • Jonas Robinson On Friday, December 7, 2018, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    I'm glad you could see the spider imagery. That's what I intended by using a repetitive tone. Thank you.

  • Samael Crowe On Wednesday, December 5, 2018, Samael Crowe (174)By person wrote:

    Wow, this was very different from what I've read up to now (but in a good way) and it felt as intricate as threads of a cobweb, creating a beautifully crafted bond in the process. Very well done!

  • Jonas Robinson On Wednesday, December 5, 2018, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    Thank you.

  • Jonas Robinson On Wednesday, February 27, 2019, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    You seem to understand it very well. Thanks! :)

  • A former member wrote: This is awesome work my friend, very dark and thought provoking. Bravo

  • Jonas Robinson On Wednesday, December 5, 2018, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    Thank you.

  • Jonas Robinson On Wednesday, February 27, 2019, Jonas Robinson (867)By person wrote:

    I'm always glad to have you enjoy my poetry, Luna. :)

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