Colder Than You

By tmanzano

He had 

enough sweaters 
around his neck

not actually on 

like trophies 



I can't explain it

and

I want to

I really 
want to
 


Waiting 
on a train

Grand and Flower
Los Angeles
 
he yelled

nonsense 

while

urinating 

on himself

down to his shoes



Slowly 
he pulled skin

burnt 

from the cold

off himself

waiting 
on gestures

from people 

that would 

look away 

too quickly



He held

out

sandpaper hands

collecting 

our hesitations



I wanted to 

I really 
wanted to

but I 

was wearing 

a sweater

so I 

couldn't  

look 

away

 

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Copyright 2018 tmanzano
Published on Saturday, August 4, 2018.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Queazenart On Friday, August 10, 2018, Queazenart (258)By person wrote:

    Reeling from the gross double meaning of the title. Great imagery and your spacing gives each line a heaping of hesitation. Great work, yet again.

  • tmanzano On Friday, August 10, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    I love that you see deeper. You so got this piece... so so got it. Thanks Q. Makes me think maybe I am not to abscure.

  • hazydaisy On Wednesday, August 8, 2018, hazydaisy (166)By person wrote:

    Sharp observations. Very, very impressive.

  • tmanzano On Friday, August 10, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    Humbled by you HD...

  • Luna Jay On Tuesday, August 7, 2018, Luna Jay (540)By person wrote:

    This really hits home with a smack in the face of this harsh reality. Extremely well written and using the fact u were also wearing a sweater as key was so good. Excellent ink

  • tmanzano On Friday, August 10, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    You rock, thanks Luna Jay.

  • dwells On Monday, August 6, 2018, dwells (5780)By person wrote:

    Nicely closing the yarn as it looped back to the opening TM. Perhaps he was just one of the lost sheep; having strayed far from the flock. This characterization was an unexpected pleasure with high marks for originality. Cheers my friend! - Dan

  • tmanzano On Monday, August 6, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    Love that you get those things. I like to button things up when I can. This was difficult to post. It admits something about myself I am not proud of, but isn’t what all this is for. Cheers back at cha Dan.

  • I IS ME On Saturday, August 4, 2018, I IS ME (545)By person wrote:

    There are those among us that no one sees that no one knows. Do we dare, Do we dare

  • tmanzano On Monday, August 6, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    Oh, we dare... thanks I IS ME.

  • Bornfrompain On Saturday, August 4, 2018, Bornfrompain (791)By person wrote:

    This was an epic ink!!! - BFP

  • tmanzano On Monday, August 6, 2018, tmanzano (215)By person wrote:

    Thank you BFP... what a great complement.

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