Unfinished

By Smiles

You play God

I'll be the devil in the details

I'm not okay


Razor sharp lips
Pressed
Against my wrist
Give me a kiss
And watch me fall

This bloodstained love is my sweetest mistake
I inhale your breath and suffocate
You make me feel so low when I should be high
Wishing for death only to be revived


You play God
I'll be the devil in your grasp


Marionette with melancholic stitching in my seams
I'm disposable fun with a noose instead of strings
I'm just another plaything to you


While you play God
I'll be the devil in your head

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Copyright 2018 Smiles
Published on Monday, July 23, 2018.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • RaheemaFKM On Wednesday, May 29, 2019, RaheemaFKM (151)By person wrote:

    "Razor sharp lips Pressed Against my wrist Give me a kiss And watch me fall" This is the kind of imagery that makes me feel spiritually aroused and visually satisfied. I love reading such vivid pictures of dangerous situations. I guess that says even more about my mental state than would probably be polite for common folk. But hey, we poets aren't common. Merely tortured and numerous. Lolz, great job. I really enjoyed this. The devil is in the details. "While you play God, I'll be the devil in your head." Nice. Very nice indeed.

  • Smiles On Tuesday, June 18, 2019, Smiles (58)By person wrote:

    Thank you Raheema. I'm very glad you enjoyed this peek into my mind.

  • threeroses On Sunday, August 12, 2018, threeroses (127)By person wrote:

    Loved how the devil shifted :) nice one smiles

  • I IS ME On Tuesday, July 24, 2018, I IS ME (379)By person wrote:

    Another one of yours that we like and you closed it perfectly. We're liking Smiles

  • Smiles On Tuesday, July 24, 2018, Smiles (58)By person wrote:

    I'm happy you said I closed it perfectly. I was really thinking that I needed one last stanza.

  • I IS ME On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME (379)By person wrote:

    Some of your best poets use couplets. The point is to write the way you feel it if you don't feel a stanza don't force it

  • Smiles On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, Smiles (58)By person wrote:

    Sometimes it's hard to know when to stop and call it good. I try to keep that in mind, but no one's perfect.

  • I IS ME On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME (379)By person wrote:

    A lot of poetry isn't perfect. We actually try to write it out some pieces will be long some short. But they all will be you. Why attempt to write a piece and withhold a portion because you're worried it may be to long. We think this is also a form of suppression. The idea is to write until you've exhausted all the pain and filth. You wouldn't go to the bathroom and take a half movement. Anyways this is our way of thinking and we're no one.

  • Smiles On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, Smiles (58)By person wrote:

    You're exactly right. It simply felt unfinished, which is why I titled it so, but I realize that it is finished. I have nothing left to add to this piece. I like your way of thinking I IS ME. Thank you.

  • I IS ME On Wednesday, July 25, 2018, I IS ME (379)By person wrote:

    We don't think we may remember. Be good or bad, but keep writing

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