Rye on ice

By Smiles

Whiskey drips

From your

Liquor licked wicked lips

I'm intoxicated

Twisted sick

Falling further

Into this abyss

Of liquid bliss

It simply fits

My wits amiss

We split a fifth


Wake up with bloody fists

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Copyright 2018 Smiles
Published on Tuesday, May 15, 2018.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Kaiser Black On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Kaiser Black (1819)By person wrote:

    Very good flow. The rhyming scheme worked very well, totally smooth. Not unlike rye on ice. Great write.

  • Smiles On Thursday, May 17, 2018, Smiles (40)By person wrote:

    Thank you Kaiser. Whiskey and I have a symbiotic like relationship these days.

  • dwells On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, dwells (5716)By person wrote:

    Whooaa! Sounds like the demon rum has no partiality to other libations here Smiles. Firewater indeed, and high marks for creativity. Cheers! - Dan

  • Smiles On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Smiles (40)By person wrote:

    I always enjoy your insight Dan. Thank you for reading.

  • Cassette On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Cassette (1397)By person wrote:

    I really liked the rhythm and flow to this.

  • Smiles On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Smiles (40)By person wrote:

    Rhythm, rhyme, and flow are the things I was trying to emphasize in this one. Thanks for reading Cassette.

  • Purposelessness On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Purposelessness (134)By person wrote:

    I have to appreciate this style, as I use it a lot and sometimes for a similar theme. Needless to say, I love it.

  • Smiles On Wednesday, May 16, 2018, Smiles (40)By person wrote:

    I've been trying to switch up my styles recently and I'm glad this one came out well. Thanks for reading.

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