How I Saw Her

By CausticChlorine

Horned honey, she hissed and sputtered, 
I've never met a manner so sweetened,
so depleting,
inept.
Caramel cutie, with kisses like visions and vistas,
Your ire I tire to listen,
with ides so cyst-like and impressed,
depressions in filler and sin.
Bebop beauty, my cowboy killer, 
so beastly in a quaintness,
and mum in mutilation,
your disdain decorating a smile so ill. 
A rose by any other name may call herself a sinner,
yet you decide, in deplorable debonair, a princess,
a paling faux pas, shameless, detached,
a stereotype in archetype,
a misinterpretation of the mind. 
I warp you, from where I stay,
as I know not any other way.
In this I decide,
laughable astuteness aplenty,
that I am a peasant prince.
Reveling in blackish ivory and thrift, 
scrambling for a truth I know is not there. 
If it is, you caught me unaware,
keeping such secrets well, 
as I lie silent in self destruct hell, 
sipping at your coffee of choice,
what swill, you damn hipster,
see ya, southern bell,
my saccharine "she".

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Copyright 2017 CausticChlorine
Published on Monday, July 10, 2017.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

How I saw her, and how I hope I'll never see her again.
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  • Queazenart On Monday, October 23, 2017, Queazenart (247)By person wrote:

    This reads like a date gone wrong to me. It's like realizing a person's lack of self-awareness in real time. I am guilty of this as well, as I have been on both sides of the table I envision that weak coffee sitting upon. This poem makes that sad, bitter part of me that got into poetry swell with delight. I commend you. Please post more.

  • CausticChlorine On Wednesday, November 1, 2017, CausticChlorine (107)By person wrote:

    I enjoy that interpretation quite a bit. However, this was an experience I had in my freshman year of high school. I wrote it that same year. The funny thing is that she and I never went on an actual date, the closest we ever got to that was when she pawed off a cup of coffee to me she was drinking in the hall while we were skipping class. It was half-full. That incident really stuck to me for some reason, not sure why.

  • Mute Serenade On Sunday, July 30, 2017, Mute Serenade (471)By person wrote:

    "I warp you, from where I stay,as I know not any other way." You slayed it, man. Excellent poem.

  • CausticChlorine On Wednesday, November 1, 2017, CausticChlorine (107)By person wrote:

    Overall I think that's the line that most people can relate to. Makes me proud to have written it.

  • Sidanne On Friday, July 14, 2017, Sidanne (30)By person wrote:

    Very pleasing tot he ear, I love the ebb and flow of the words and the repeating hiss...of the s-sounds and the mmm...like the pondering hum when one says, "hmmm..." unable to put words to a feeling. My favorite line: "a misinterpretation of the mind." Write on!

  • CausticChlorine On Friday, July 14, 2017, CausticChlorine (107)By person wrote:

    Honestly, that line is probably one of my favorites from this one. There are a lot of phrases in it I enjoy, even after looking back on it a couple years later.

  • A former member wrote: Such sweetness at first, but then that unmistakable stab when one looks deeper, and it's a stab that I damn sure felt. Wonderfully crafted in all of it's sweet venom. Welcome to our midst, dearie. Rebs:).

  • CausticChlorine On Monday, July 10, 2017, CausticChlorine (107)By person wrote:

    Thank you very much. I'm glad to be here!

  • Drea On Monday, July 10, 2017, Drea (1529)By person wrote:

    Well that was a ride. I actually enjoyed this. Is felt honest and raw. It also flowed really well. Nicely done.

  • CausticChlorine On Monday, July 10, 2017, CausticChlorine (107)By person wrote:

    Thank you! The subject of the piece used to be a bit of a sore spot for me, so I hope I did her justice. It's been a few years since the piece actually held relevance, though.

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