Thank you Father
By UnsilentMajority
This is about my step father...It was hastely put togeather,I did not want
to lose my ideas I will finish it later but fell free to critisize
You would yell and scream
If I did not make the team
You would drink all the time
Then beat me as tho I commited some crime
Then one day I came home with a bat
when I found out you beat my mother
And lucky for you not my little brother
I was going to kill
You looked in to my eyes and began to cry
The day of reckoning had come
For 11 years you made me shed tears
A murderous impulse was beckoning
Lucky for you the PIGS rolled in too
A while later you called on the phone
While I sat in MY home, promisimg me it was't over
I told you that day to stay away
For if you did not, and I saw you bring harm
With a big happy grin
I would send you to whatever God you belive in
You showed me the way to be the man i want to be
wich is the opposite of you
For this I offer thanks
Comments on "Thank you Father"
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On Sunday, February 13, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(242) wrote:
nicely done this rocked -kitty
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A former member wrote:
i love it, nice job-kit_kat
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On Tuesday, June 1, 2004, Beautiful Scars
(175) wrote:
some powerfull shit man, Nice work. ..::Rage::...
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On Monday, April 26, 2004, murder_in_clubland
(388) wrote:
fucking amazing...my mother is the same way ~ss
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A former member wrote:
strong, powerful, excellent...i loved it
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On Thursday, November 27, 2003, A Velvet Tongue
(436) wrote:
everything happens for a reason they say...this is a classic case of monkey see...monkey does different...Nice write..Leonard Cohen is a God btw...*grins*
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On Thursday, October 16, 2003, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
very strong feeling there... great job and keep venting, the writing from it is good
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On Thursday, October 16, 2003, nell
(271) wrote:
this is a strong write,holds a powerful message. Nicely done=)
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On Thursday, October 9, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(235) wrote:
I agree with Kefka, this write is very personal, but I will criticize for what is...strong, powerful and encouraging...I will be a greater father than my father...that's what "real men" do+Fallen One+
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On Monday, October 6, 2003, Silver Spectre
(90) wrote:
i like the way you expressed yourself in this...not overly aggressive and understanding the lesson learrned... and i think you are right ...there is no real form because if there was you would feel satisfied afterwards.~silver~
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On Wednesday, October 1, 2003, Drea
(1443) wrote:
i know how you feel. this hits close to home. great write ~Drea~
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A former member wrote:
I like this a lot,i understand exactly how this feels,unfortunatly.But great to read,very strong and very emotional..xxx...
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On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, Dancing_Monkey
(1246) wrote:
did I do ennything to encurage this? good write..
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On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
profound in many ways, strong, well said well done.........urban
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On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
oOo they don't call you hatebunny for nothing, i hope the venting out helps a little, good write -Kryz
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On Thursday, September 25, 2003, UnsilentMajority
(19) wrote:
there is no real form of venting
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On Thursday, November 27, 2003, Chaos-Slayer-
(7) wrote:
You also have some damn good works.-CS