Thank you Father

By UnsilentMajority

This is about my step father...It was hastely put togeather,I did not want to lose my ideas I will finish it later but fell free to critisize


You would yell and scream
If I did not make the team
You would drink all the time
Then beat me as tho I commited some crime
Then one day I came home with a bat
when I found out you beat my mother
And lucky for you not my little brother
I was going to kill
You looked in to my eyes and began to cry
The day of reckoning had come
For 11 years you made me shed tears
A murderous impulse was beckoning
Lucky for you the PIGS rolled in too

A while later you called on the phone
While I sat in MY home, promisimg me it was't over
I told you that day to stay away
For if you did not, and I saw you bring harm
With a big happy grin
I would send you to whatever God you belive in

You showed me the way to be the man i want to be
wich is the opposite of you
For this I offer thanks


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Copyright 2003 HateBunny
Published on Wednesday, September 17, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Sticky Kitty On Sunday, February 13, 2005, Sticky Kitty (242)By person wrote:

    nicely done this rocked -kitty

  • A former member wrote: i love it, nice job-kit_kat

  • Beautiful Scars On Tuesday, June 1, 2004, Beautiful Scars (175)By person wrote:

    some powerfull shit man, Nice work. ..::Rage::...

  • murder_in_clubland On Monday, April 26, 2004, murder_in_clubland (388)By person wrote:

    fucking amazing...my mother is the same way ~ss

  • A former member wrote: strong, powerful, excellent...i loved it

  • A Velvet Tongue On Thursday, November 27, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436)By person wrote:

    everything happens for a reason they say...this is a classic case of monkey see...monkey does different...Nice write..Leonard Cohen is a God btw...*grins*

  • Daughter_Of_The_Moon On Thursday, October 16, 2003, Daughter_Of_The_Moon (106)By person wrote:

    very strong feeling there... great job and keep venting, the writing from it is good

  • nell On Thursday, October 16, 2003, nell (271)By person wrote:

    this is a strong write,holds a powerful message. Nicely done=)

  • The Fallen Angel On Thursday, October 9, 2003, The Fallen Angel (235)By person wrote:

    I agree with Kefka, this write is very personal, but I will criticize for what is...strong, powerful and encouraging...I will be a greater father than my father...that's what "real men" do+Fallen One+

  • Silver Spectre On Monday, October 6, 2003, Silver Spectre (90)By person wrote:

    i like the way you expressed yourself in this...not overly aggressive and understanding the lesson learrned... and i think you are right ...there is no real form because if there was you would feel satisfied afterwards.~silver~

  • Drea On Wednesday, October 1, 2003, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    i know how you feel. this hits close to home. great write ~Drea~

  • A former member wrote: I like this a lot,i understand exactly how this feels,unfortunatly.But great to read,very strong and very emotional..xxx...

  • Dancing_Monkey On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    did I do ennything to encurage this? good write..

  • urbanhumility On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, urbanhumility (1175)By person wrote:

    profound in many ways, strong, well said well done.........urban

  • Crystal Passion On Wednesday, September 17, 2003, Crystal Passion (221)By person wrote:

    oOo they don't call you hatebunny for nothing, i hope the venting out helps a little, good write -Kryz

  • UnsilentMajority On Thursday, September 25, 2003, UnsilentMajority (19)By person wrote:

    there is no real form of venting

  • Chaos-Slayer- On Thursday, November 27, 2003, Chaos-Slayer- (7)By person wrote:

    You also have some damn good works.-CS

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