Vintage Luggage

By tmanzano

He packed the remaining slightness of her
tightly into an old timey suit case the same
color as his home made heart
to catch a red eye out of Arizona.

Brass buckles caught his pant leg
as he ran, throwing him to high traffic
carpet made of things that burned
his face to slow him to a stop.

Sitting up he noticed she was spread
about in pieces again and understood
saying goodbye would be more difficult
than an old timey suitcase could be packed into.

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Copyright 2016 tmanzano
Published on Sunday, April 3, 2016.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Time seems to capture those held in memories that have passed and hurt as much as it did then.
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  • carlosjackal On Sunday, January 13, 2019, carlosjackal (2477)By person wrote:

    I can only echo everyone else. this is just brilliant.

  • tmanzano On Saturday, April 13, 2019, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Maybe the most difficult write I have ever made. It was about my grandmother. A most wonderful person. Thank you Carlosjackle. Thank you for reminding me of her. Sorry it has taken so long to thank you for your comment. I have been... under a rock.

  • blue On Wednesday, April 13, 2016, blue (1457)By person wrote:

    Vintage luggage... What a wonderful metaphor for those deep enduring memories we carry around with us, and can never quite bury. Poetically sound. ~b

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Such a thoughtful comment. Thank you blue.

  • dwells On Wednesday, April 13, 2016, dwells (5719)By person wrote:

    A surprise ending to give the reader a jarring jolt of OMG! Wonderfully set up TM and you should have used the straps. Still chuckling over the high traffic pattern area of the carpet. Shags were the worst - cheers! - Dan

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Hahaha... Yes, maybe straps next time. Shag carpet... Still laughing. Thanks man.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Wednesday, April 6, 2016, TropicalSnowstorm (1689)By person wrote:

    Very cool piece! I like the imagery and the language was precise and spot on in setting the mood. Well done! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Thanks a ton TS... Humbled.

  • soul_versing On Tuesday, April 5, 2016, soul_versing (1224)By person wrote:

    .bows head for a brief moment of silence. Your author's note is exact, relatable and drives deep. You know, what intrigued me about this was the amount of detail you squeezed in --in short stanzas. -Write on Scholar

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Thank you TG... You always have great observations.

  • CoffeeBreak On Monday, April 4, 2016, CoffeeBreak (27)By person wrote:

    This touched a personal cord inside. I enjoyed this very much. Brief but rounds out.

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Thank you for that. Relatable is such a great compliment.

  • bpathos On Sunday, April 3, 2016, bpathos (90)By person wrote:

    To me this is a trailer for a great story to come. It held my interest and left me wanting more. Two of the highest qualities of anything experienced.

  • tmanzano On Sunday, April 17, 2016, tmanzano (220)By person wrote:

    Such a nice post. Thank you.

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