On The Rings Of Saturn

By carlosjackal

She acts like
this is her last night
in this city.

She doesn't drive
but she'll be
your great lover.

A universe
of electric possibilities.

The magic and beauty
of gold and green
circuit board patterns
sending signals 
to loved ones
on the rings
of Saturn.

She sits
and blurs her sight
until into vision
her dream wife appears.

Her smile is a gift.

Someone special 
who takes her mind
and makes it
her treasure.

Someone
who makes her
feel like
home.



 

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© 2017 Carl Denyer
Published on Tuesday, October 6, 2015.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Mute Serenade On Saturday, September 16, 2017, Mute Serenade (471)By person wrote:

    I don't know what to write about this one. I like it, and in such a short time you weave such a splendid character! Beautiful imagery as always.

  • A former member wrote: Saturn's rings hold the fascination of many people, and the use of them in this poem lends it a celestial beauty that really completed it nicely. Once again, another good choice for Poem Of The Day! Queen Reb:).

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, November 5, 2015, carlosjackal (2465)By person wrote:

    Thank you Star, Steve and Tattoo Goddess! :) It's not even been a month since I wrote this piece....Mega chuffed I am :)

  • soul_versing On Thursday, November 5, 2015, soul_versing (1203)By person wrote:

    Awe. Thank you. And please, call me Nett. -Bows Scholar

  • Star On Thursday, November 5, 2015, Star (1268)By person wrote:

    I can say that I am not surprised that this got PotD. Congratulations!

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Thursday, November 5, 2015, TropicalSnowstorm (1709)By person wrote:

    Gorgeous imagery! I love the opener, "She acts like this is her last night in this city" - great personification! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • soul_versing On Thursday, November 5, 2015, soul_versing (1203)By person wrote:

    Well deserved for PoTD, I tip my hat to thee. -write on Scholar

  • soul_versing On Tuesday, November 3, 2015, soul_versing (1203)By person wrote:

    My heart began to flutter upon reading, "The magic and beauty of gold and green circuit board patterns sending signals  to loved ones on the rings of Saturn." Such a gorgeous write. I will definitely have to come back to this one. -bows Scholar

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