This Poem Really Sucks. Dont Read it.
By Demosthenes
this is one of those "about me" poem assignments they give us every year.
someones advice was to do it from someone elses perspective, so its third
person, but it IS about me. *ponders* o screw it. dont read this. read
~Scribbling Out Oxygen.~ At least that one shows what i can do. this one
just sucks. -B
~
Six years old
A crack was heard, soft though it may be
The second rung wasn’t good enough for her
So blue-green dripped
And the grass grew
While she settled for pale pink
One time she was happy
And determinedly refused the dark fabric
Simultaneously
A new longing evolved
And sibling rivalry wrote her blocking
It was hardly more legible than a hairline fracture could provide
X + 4
Twenty-five percent smile
Twenty-five percent decency
Fifty percent Speak of the Devil
No metaphors
The worst 365 kicked the habit
And the faucet leaks softly when it's deserved
She discovered a melody for the first time
And beauty poured itself from graphite
Or so she thought
But it was not until the fourth prime
That any masterpiece was worth reading
Because her life force tasted too
Perfect
To resist
And her inspiration flowed too
Fluidly
To disregard
So her words screamed too
Loudly
To ignore
Subsequent
Word of mouth proved helpful for once
She typed out an orator
And mailed in a letter
And one more time
She was happy
~
GOD DANGIT, WHERE DID MY BLOODY TALENT GO?!
*deep breaths* anyway. i did it for school, so youve gotta give me some
slack. ill write something good and get it posted real soon. i promise.
i think. i hope.
Comments on "This Poem Really Sucks. Dont Read it."
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On Monday, January 16, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(564) wrote:
lol the title striked curioustity in me I couldn't resist. And the pome was good
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On Sunday, October 9, 2005, Sky Singer
(153) wrote:
i keep on coming back to your works; they're wonderful. and yes, sometimes the lines don't quite make sense to the reader, but that's the beauty of poetry-- it is what you take from it =)
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On Thursday, August 18, 2005, heart broken suicide
(18) wrote:
i actually kinda like it i mean it doesnt make sense but i like it
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A former member wrote:
um naturally anything that says dont read i will read didnt think it sucked but hey thats just my opinion coulc be wrong nice write ~~GOTHIC~~
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A former member wrote:
I like this better than scribbling out oxygen. - - - Mari
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On Thursday, May 27, 2004, aXe FactoR
(335) wrote:
the title just draws me in dear...lol... reverse psychology...lol...its nice. really. not sucky at all.
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A former member wrote:
Man, I just had to read this. The title just kinda made it so, nice write, and it doesn't suck, you knew that before you slapped that title on it ;-)
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A former member wrote:
Umm, I kind of think this one is btter than Scribbling Out Oxygen.......
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On Sunday, March 7, 2004, Demosthenes
(155) wrote:
youre kidding, right? -B
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A former member wrote:
This poem...did not suck.
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On Wednesday, February 18, 2004, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
DAMMIT, I READ IT AGAIN, DAMN TITLE >_
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On Sunday, December 7, 2003, comablackout
(2) wrote:
sorry, i read it, i had to though, i mean, the title, AHHH IT DRAWS YOU IN!!!!!!!
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On Monday, December 1, 2003, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
Why do you not want people to read this, this was a good piece, you have talent, good work ~Emptyness~
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On Friday, November 7, 2003, Drea
(1443) wrote:
i really liked this. you are very talented. i mean that ~Drea~
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A former member wrote:
I did read it... will I die? Am I curs-ed for life??? Aggghhh!
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On Sunday, September 21, 2003, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
this doesnt suck at all, good write :D *~*aNDReW*~*
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On Thursday, September 11, 2003, Elf
(47) wrote:
i don't believe your capable of writing anything that sucks. this certaintly doesn't. stop being so hard on yourself. nice poem. i like it.
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On Wednesday, September 10, 2003, Chameleon
(111) wrote:
I liked this a lot Demos'...your talent is there...don't worry so much(=
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On Thursday, September 4, 2003, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
lol I enjoyed the hell out of it. It was very entertaining.
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A former member wrote:
well.... i liked the title... no, its a good piece. some parts were stronger than others. i thought that the "x+4" stanza was the best.