War Party

By Ophelia

The fire glowed,
ambers hidding beneath the ash,
bodies every where,
stars and moon hidden from view,
in the distance a wolf howls.
Waggons burned,
smoke fills the air,
horse neigh skittishly,
eight warriors stand their ground.

One lone survivor,
trys to crawl,
to hide.
Eight warriors watch in delight,
what pain will they inflict,
first they gather the scalps,
blood dripping running into the land,
their land.

Tied to a tree a man,
bleeding from many cuts,
no longer cries in pain,
Eight warriors clean their knives,
wiping his blood away with sand.

They laugh,
talking in their native tongue,
he only sees demons,
covered in his blood,
This must be hell his mind screams.

Eight warriors,
ride off in the dark.
The smell of blood,
brings life out of the night.
A man longing for death,
receives his wish.



I received inspiration for this after reading two works by
Judgement, I hope this will find it's way to him.

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Copyright 2003 Ophelia
Published on Saturday, August 23, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Absolutely beautiful write.

  • Scarrzz On Monday, August 16, 2010, Scarrzz (238)By person wrote:

    Great story, very engaging and descriptive wording, and your style held my attention very well. That was an awesome way of saying that the wolf came in and answered his prayer. Scholar

  • Kinkypoptart On Sunday, April 17, 2005, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    long but beautiful. ~*~Tart~*~

  • Ophelia On Tuesday, April 19, 2005, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    lol does that mean I should have left something out and made it short I don't think I can do short I tend to be wordy very wordy .........O

  • WinterGrave On Tuesday, March 2, 2004, WinterGrave (258)By person wrote:

    Vary nice, most enjoyable read.~~~Grave

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    very diff from your other works. very raw, very very dark. I enjoyed it.

  • Raze Drake On Sunday, September 28, 2003, Raze Drake (85)By person wrote:

    ah......lead us on into battle. we are with you.

  • Stranger On Tuesday, September 16, 2003, Stranger (264)By person wrote:

    I think this my favorite from you. Visually alive, sadistic and dark. Very consistent tone, feeling and pace through the whole piece. Excellent.

  • A former member wrote: I have seen those warriors in my own dreams it's like you were right there seeing what I saw and heard!

  • A former member wrote: I really enjoyed this poem. For some reason it reminded me of Congress vs. The Middle Class, don't ask me why. Great job, will have to read more of your works. ~Urban Shipwreck~

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, August 28, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    fantastic... I love it.. Monkey

  • Blinded_Tiger On Wednesday, August 27, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    You little rebel you *wink* I realy enjoyed it O. Immensely. And its good to see you try out new things, in this write. You will never cease to amaze me, about that im sure. Tiger

  • _Andrew_ On Wednesday, August 27, 2003, _Andrew_ (245)By person wrote:

    awesome write, this was cool from start to finish *~*aNDReW*~*

  • A former member wrote: Heh heh, i liked it, but jeez!! Just when i thought Kefka's head couldn't get any bigger....good job!! ~Mercy~

  • Six-Out On Sunday, August 24, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Great Ophie, just make his ego bigger why don't ya.

  • worm On Sunday, August 24, 2003, worm (1194)By person wrote:

    a well thought out and inspiring piece of work! beautifully done... worm

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