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blatant metaphore
By BetaWolfinVA
Spiraling slowly
one wing ripped violently
spiraling through space
calling over open air
reaching out so i don't fall
.
she doesn't understand
the use i made old flames texts
bulk prohibition
broke both my supports
scrabbling, trying not to fall
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Copyright 2013 HHMCameron
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On Thursday, September 19, 2013, blue angel
(877)
wrote:
I've read this one several times... I do like it... the depths is clear... I enjoy the broken wings/supports usage... very blatant in that regards. Nice work.
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On Thursday, September 19, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795) wrote:
I keep wanting to add a stanza for flameout... but part of me feels that the plain spoken part already says it... some times the most subtle means of expression is a sledgehammer... or a pebble dropped from orbit...
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On Wednesday, September 18, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
great piece! i love the style of this one. ciao, T/S
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On Thursday, September 19, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(795) wrote:
glad u liked it :)
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