The Night Stalker

By Commander_Cadaver

Slipping into their open window, 
The Night Stalker pulls out his .25 caliber pistol 
And finds the husband of the couple,  
Sleeping next to his wife. 
Walking up to the husband, smiling menacingly, 
The Night Stalker places the barrel of the pistol 
To the skull of the husband and pulls the trigger 
Waking up the wife as blood and brain spatter  
Covering a small area in red and pink. 
Grabbing the wife, The Night Stalker covers her mouth 
Stopping her from screaming as he mounts her. 
Ripping at her clothes, he beats her with his fist, 
Trying to keep her subdued and still. 
With her slightly unconscious and laying still, 
He pulls his pants down and begins to rape her 
Fulfilling every perverted fantasy he could imagine. 
As he finishes and pulls his pants up, 
He stands over her and fires a round   
From his pistol into her head and smiles. 
Grabbing a stick of lipstick, he stares at the wall 
Above the bed of the dead couple. 
Grinning like the mad man he is,  
He draws a pentagram on the wall 
And above the two upper points of the pentagram, 
He writes "JACK THE KNIFE" and drops the lipstick. 
Grabbing anything of value, he walks out of the house 
And slips into the night, ready to kill again.

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Copyright 2013 Commander_Cadaver
Published on Tuesday, August 27, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Devilish On Friday, March 15, 2019, Devilish (2662)By person wrote:

    Kinda hot tho, im thinking "why not get off on the killing with the wife before shooting her?" But i am reminded time and time again not everyone thinks like me .. :) ... Nice !! Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Nice work would have been better to use a knife would have made it more bloody but either way very well written Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I'm also a Richard Ramirez devotee, so thanks. .25 caliber indeed. Scholar

  • Commander_Cadaver On Wednesday, August 27, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    He was definitely an interesting serial killer. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  • A former member wrote: The tone of the poem conveys the true horror. Not only are these acts committed but they are committed with ease and no hesitation. You really put across the confidence and lack of remorse evident in the killer. Good write.

  • A former member wrote: Wow... Very very well penned! It was a vivid experience for me as I read.. The imagery in my head was great.. Just like reading an excellent book! :)

  • Commander_Cadaver On Friday, July 11, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    Thank you for reading and for the comment.

  • A former member wrote: great piece. Richard Ramirez is one of my favorite serial killers

  • Commander_Cadaver On Saturday, May 17, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    He was one of my favorite as well. Sad that he passed away last year. Thanks for reading and the comment (:

  • A former member wrote: same here and your welcome

  • Intoxicating Delirium On Thursday, May 1, 2014, Intoxicating Delirium (275)By person wrote:

    Precisely why you should lock your windows!!! haha. Sometimes I feel like when people get murdered it's half their fault. I mean, don't put yourself in a situation to be murdered, and you will probably be fine...Maybe I'm just paranoid. Another riveting write from you. Nice one :)

  • Commander_Cadaver On Saturday, May 17, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    Haha I know what you mean. Doors and windows have locks on them for a reason and if a serial killer is known to be out and about, lock your shit up. Some people learn the hard way. Thanks for reading and the comment (:

  • sIo On Friday, April 25, 2014, sIo (926)By person wrote:

    I am a serial killer fanatic and find them morbidly fascinating and know a lot of them and cant seem to remember why that name doesn't ring a bell. Richard Ramirez. I have work to do lol.

  • A former member wrote: I really like this piece! Being the slasher film fanatic that I am, it was really intriguing. Your attention to sensory details was spot on too and I could visualize everything! Hats off to you! If you've ever read Crime and Punishment Dostoevsky would be smiling at your sinister description :)

  • Commander_Cadaver On Friday, January 24, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    Thank you and glad it liked it, though I think this might be my least detailed writing on here. But again, glad you liked it :)

  • A former member wrote: Woohooooooo pentagrams :3 what an evil masterpiece, i love it....how morbid a person can just get...fascinates me deeply....SHEMHAMFORASH!

  • Commander_Cadaver On Friday, January 24, 2014, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    Did not see this comment here. And yep, Richard Ramirez was a Satanist, even drew a pentagram on his palm when he went to court, smiling as he held it up so they could take a picture of it. He was quite interesting. Glad you liked it.

  • haunted On Friday, September 6, 2013, haunted (851)By person wrote:

    this is awesome! when I was growing up I remember my mom being terrified and anal about locking everything up. because mr. Ramirez was on the prowl. we lived a half hour from where most of his bad assness took place. great tribute cadaver!

  • Commander_Cadaver On Friday, September 6, 2013, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    For a sloppy serial killer, he was indeed quite the bad ass. And thank you :)

  • Despair On Saturday, August 31, 2013, Despair (31)By person wrote:

    It's official, I love everything that you've written. Keep up the good work.

  • A former member wrote: Are we talking Richard Ramirez here? he´+s on deathrow right now, awaiting execution by gaschamber. He pulled their eyes out too (do your homework) and probably drew a pentagram in the victims blood...but what do I know. He also ate a melon and thought ACDC was antichrist demon child...fun times. It was an excellent poem, though..loved it.

  • Commander_Cadaver On Tuesday, August 27, 2013, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    Yes, this was about Richard Ramirez. And all the reports I read from articles and books, I never once read that he ripped out the eyes of his victims, he did in fact use lipstick to draw the pentagram and write "Jack the Knife", and he passed away due to natural causes in June, I believe.

  • A former member wrote: I liked it because it was scary and it kept my attention through the whole poem I guess i am weird I like the violence

  • Lux On Tuesday, August 27, 2013, Lux (299)By person wrote:

    Something tells me you'll fit right in. This was pretty violent, not sure if I enjoy it or not. The writing behind it was superb though. Welcome to DP. The masses will collect you.

  • Commander_Cadaver On Tuesday, August 27, 2013, Commander_Cadaver (245)By person wrote:

    :) Why thank you.

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