name me forsaken

By FadedBlues

name me forsaken

of love’s cruel folly I may sing
the dove of hope has taken wing
I give my heart, my dreams, my all
and if I rise, again I fall

I wither in the brightest light
a starling not of grace and fire
but merely made of flesh and bone
who lacks the heart to dance alone

abandoned by the hand I crave
I seek the solace of the grave
then voices from a place unknown
echo cries that were my own

they gather near, a shimmering host
lovers betrayed, and each a ghost
they hear my cry and bear my shame
the spectral ones who know my name




 

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Published on Sunday, May 26, 2013.     Filed under: "Graphic Art"
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  • A former member wrote: Absolutely fantastic! You are very gifted and use very eloquent words that are very descriptive of your emotions. Keep writing!

  • BlackVelvet Rose On Friday, June 14, 2013, BlackVelvet Rose (175)By person wrote:

    There is so much character in this, and am sad to admit but is how i feel at times. Excellent write! :) Scholar

  • blue angel On Tuesday, May 28, 2013, blue angel (877)By person wrote:

    Spiritually evoking ! The words flowed as a graceful dance. Brilliantly crafted* Amazing visuals too *_*

  • Nehema On Tuesday, May 28, 2013, Nehema (962)By person wrote:

    There is no escaping the ghosts. I agree with your philosophy - XXOO Scholar

  • FadedBlues On Tuesday, May 28, 2013, FadedBlues (2172)By person wrote:

    Friends, thanks. my feeling is that a poem doesn't have to be rigidly technical. flaws add character...

  • Stephanie Sideways On Monday, May 27, 2013, Stephanie Sideways (276)By person wrote:

    The rhyme scheme and flow was flawless and beautiful. But why fire and not' or flight' in that second stanza? Too twee ? To obvious? Was the loss of rhyme enough to indicate the loss of flight. ?? Amazing as always though. !!!! :-) X

  • Devilish On Monday, May 27, 2013, Devilish (2662)By person wrote:

    My god your amazing. no one can touch your level sir ... bows to the king. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Very fluid read, and a little haunting I must say. Scholar

  • andhaka On Sunday, May 26, 2013, andhaka (168)By person wrote:

    wow....absolutely, heart breakingly beautiful.

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