Wishing for you

By BetaWolfinVA

Wishing for you
Coming Down off a Sugar High (and Wishing for you)
====================
my only regret
about last night is that you
weren't really here
.
cuddled in my arms
and cupped, as i drifted off
to sweet dreamless? sleep
 

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Copyright Wednesday, 27 February 2013 HHMCameron
Published on Wednesday, February 27, 2013.     Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

think that stanzas 5 and 7 are much better apart on their own, thats how it started really (but i started intending to write about the sugar high).... heck with it, doing both versions, tell me if either or both versions are worth saving
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  • Pryzm On Thursday, February 28, 2013, Pryzm (71)By person wrote:

    Very nice....I like this one a lot. You're voice is unique and welcoming. Thank you.

  • BetaWolfinVA On Friday, March 1, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    thank you... some times it seams that the less i write the better i am LOL... glad that you enjoyed it :) Scholar

  • Dei On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    i prefer the shorter version. I find it a bit more honest and personal. like you arent trying to hide what you really mean under pretty blankets. both ARE beautiful. But the first one won me.

  • BetaWolfinVA On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    agreed: truly doesn't really matter where the feeling came from, only that it is remembered Scholar

  • Malice In Wonderland On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    just remember, all that glitters is not gold.... this is sweet and pretty, and absolutely lovely.... I have been in this position many a time... Scholar

  • BetaWolfinVA On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    i thnk we all have been, me, im just riding the waves, i think i went to sleep happy for the first time in a long time Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I think both versions work but with definite different meaning, when stanzas 5 and are separated, to me the separate 5 and 7 are something of longing and love, but when added to the sugar high it conjures images of love but also of someone who's out of it. great write though i really enjoyed it Scholar

  • BetaWolfinVA On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    thank you very much, glad that you enjoyed it :) Scholar

  • devilsrighthand On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, devilsrighthand (27)By person wrote:

    I liked it, I felt something when i read "my only regret about last night is that you weren't really here". It touched me deep down, thankyou.

  • BetaWolfinVA On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (795)By person wrote:

    those two stanzas are what i woke up with this morning Scholar

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