Immerciful Sleep

By Diva_Satanica

I hide my tears behind a plastic smile,
I'm only going to live for a short while.

Along with these pills I swallow my pride,
death train comes, I go along for a ride.

I lay down on my blackened bed,
by morning hopefully I'll be dead.

They all thought I was in deep sleep,
now that they've noticed they sadly weep.

Isn't there suppose to be bright lights I walk to?
I only see this dark hole I fall through.

Family and friends all mourne at my wake,
Dear Satan, my soul is yours to take.

Down I go into the ground,
You see even with out me, the world still goes 'round.

One year since it happend, my bodies now rotten,
gladly now I am forgotten.

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Copyright 2003 Diva_Satanica
Published on Thursday, August 7, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: INTENSE!

  • A former member wrote: This work left me teary eyed because you told of a world without you and I, for a brief moment, felt the world without you, for me, I am not sure it will spin a little slower without you...

  • Seraphic On Monday, August 11, 2003, Seraphic (209)By person wrote:

    ah, suicide poems, I've written quite a few in my day...all very sad, but this poem (by style and flow) is really good

  • A Velvet Tongue On Sunday, August 10, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436)By person wrote:

    Although I detest suicide poems..(millions of them everywhere everywhere) sometimes it is sad but true, that when the smoke clears, ppl just tend to forget. Sad though, that this must apply to a life as well..~Vel~

  • A former member wrote: i love your work. I really like how this poem all flows together keep it up

  • A former member wrote: Very good poem~whort_diddy

  • Aurora_Light On Friday, August 8, 2003, Aurora_Light (472)By person wrote:

    nice its not the typical poem nice but its not the answer

  • A former member wrote: Suicide is a god thing as long as the gun you fire is filled with cum. If the gun is filled with bullets, then you are not sexy. You are a punk. Die.

  • Rebel_Angel On Thursday, August 7, 2003, Rebel_Angel (321)By person wrote:

    This is very good...This is a different way to write a suicide poem... I like it!

  • aNaRcHyPoEt On Thursday, August 7, 2003, aNaRcHyPoEt (24)By person wrote:

    wow. very good. ~ap

  • Blinded_Tiger On Thursday, August 7, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    This poem got style and flow. Terms like Saten make little sense to me. I often catch myself lauging when looking at the word. So that ruined it slightly for me. Anyway the rest i enjoyed.

  • Blinded_Tiger On Thursday, August 7, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    Ohh i see now that i cant even spell it hehe Sorry.

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