The Shadow Of His Ruin

By cre

In the darkness and the silence,
In the shadow of his ruin,
She lay still and broken-minded,
Though no one saw just what he'd done.
In the quietness of "after",
Though her lips did try to speak;
Her head forgot the words,
And her voice was just too weak.
In the horror and the knowledge,
Of a torn and falling sky,
Her soul disintegrated,
And dissolved into the night.

How one can take another,
And destroy a tender world;
To weave a waking nightmare,
For a sad and shattered girl.

In the darkness and the silence,
Of an end too soon begun;
She lay slain beneath his sin,
In the shadow of his ruin.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Monday, July 21, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: A very pretty write, in a twisted sort of way... I applaud you.

  • Circe Avalon On Friday, November 9, 2007, Circe Avalon (115)By person wrote:

    I loved this. yeah, loved...okay, now that I look like an ass....

  • October Death On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, October Death (18)By person wrote:

    Frighteningly beautiful...*Adds you to my favories* I love your works

  • KittyStryker On Thursday, July 24, 2003, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    i really think i can only read this poem once. once more and it'd hit something in me i need someone here, physically, before i feel ok dealing with it. which means... well done.

  • CharlottesWeb On Thursday, July 24, 2003, CharlottesWeb (511)By person wrote:

    No way can I explain my feelings for this...but maybe...possibly a few of them in a visual metaphor. Like beautiful ghostly woman... saddened and mezmerized by the site of blood droplets floating through her hand.

  • GreekPhilosopher On Wednesday, July 23, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (156)By person wrote:

    Liked This One. Too Good. GPhD.

  • A former member wrote: how can one take another and destroy a tender world...so much pain to live through and then to write so beautifully..I wish I had something way original to tell you, but all I can think is: sad yet beautiful.

  • DoctorAsh On Monday, July 21, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    such a traumatizing write cre [powerful and crushing] Beutiful as always . yup yup

  • Jonas On Monday, July 21, 2003, Jonas (720)By person wrote:

    always piercing, like a sliver of light through perfect dark, white and radiant, but not quite enough to stifle the lack of light permeating this space... you own the spark, the flash of light contained but never owning the night

  • Ophelia On Monday, July 21, 2003, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    beautiful the way you write...........O.

  • Demosthenes On Monday, July 21, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    im going to call you jane for a minute, because it seems so much more honest. jane, you ARE, the AWESOMEST person, all moment. thats a good thing. very good. -B

  • Six-Out On Monday, July 21, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Jane, I remember when you were still a wee poet that no one knew. I knew it wouldn't be long before you were the star of dp, and this is why. You have a way with words that makes my mouth drop. So much talent, and brains, and of course cuteness mixed in o

  • Six-Out On Monday, July 21, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    one person. I hope one day I can match your ability. :-D

  • CharlottesWeb On Thursday, July 24, 2003, CharlottesWeb (511)By person wrote:

    me too

  • A former member wrote: i can't figure out what to tell you about this, it was that good.. ****** six stars ( and noone EVER gets six stars :D)

  • A former member wrote: Woah Jane, Woah... I'll comment again when I figure out how to express my feelings towards this piece

  • A former member wrote: Jane, your words flow beautifully in this piece... It was brilliant... Bleeding with betrayal and fear at the same time.... absolutely wonderful

  • maddin foxxxy On Monday, July 21, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358)By person wrote:

    beautiful..simply lovely...describes the terrible action of one affecting the other..nicely done.

  • A former member wrote: beautiful but bitter. always enjoyed. well done cre


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