the girls that are good in bed

By Nixx

girls that are good in bed are open hearted 
passionate behind closed doors
desirable heat
you leave us in defeat

girls that are good in bed are broken hearted  
once your done there's nothing left to you
we can give more
if we were more than just your whore

to the girls that have clearly departed (your life)
you were never clear on what we were to you
i get it
your a piece of shit

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Copyright 2012 Nixx
Published on Saturday, April 28, 2012.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

i wrote this then accidently clicked my side mouse button (back a page) and lost it all. the origanal is always better :(
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  • Cassandraspeaks On Sunday, April 29, 2012, Cassandraspeaks (13)By person wrote:

    If the original was better then it would have knocked me off my feet! Amazing work!

  • dwells On Sunday, April 29, 2012, dwells (5704)By person wrote:

    They do know who they are, and they give completely, makes it all that much harder to leave, cheers!

  • Chaos God On Sunday, April 29, 2012, Chaos God (534)By person wrote:

    Damn, I Hate When That Happens. On The Bright Side, This Work Was Clever As Well As Quite Skillfully Executed... Keep Em Flowin :D

  • Carmina Gitana On Saturday, April 28, 2012, Carmina Gitana (158)By person wrote:

    I've lost a piece or two in my time; sucks :) But this is a very cool idea. I like the brevity and clarity. Don't feel compelled to rhyme at the cost of good phrasing. ("in defeat" is almost always more awkward than "defeated" when it means the same thing) Keep looking for your original, or maybe something even better than the original! :) Because this is an edgy, sexy, sharp snapping mini-rant, and I like it :)

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