Waiting

By Rebel_Angel

let me know what you think and any changes you think should be made. I'm thinking it doesn't sound just right...


As the days go by,
I sit and wonder why?
Why your with her instead of me,
What I did wrong so there was no we.

Waiting for my chance,
Before there's no time left to dance.
Not wanting to think about you leaving before I get my chance,
For I would be left all alone for my very last dance.

Still thinking about us,
And wondering why it never was;
Is a horrible feeling,
I'm left with unwilling,

But that is only one possible outcome that I will have to deal with when the time comes.

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Copyright 2003 Rebel_Angel
Published on Sunday, July 13, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • The Fallen Angel On Sunday, August 10, 2003, The Fallen Angel (235)By person wrote:

    Give this a title...it deserves to have a title

  • Abbyernathie On Saturday, August 9, 2003, Abbyernathie (61)By person wrote:

    i don't know what u're talking about, it sounds right to me!

  • finaldestiny On Wednesday, July 23, 2003, finaldestiny (74)By person wrote:

    i think it is a well written poem, just in the first paragraph dont put two questions in a row, otherwise it's all good, my props!

  • blackdarkness On Monday, July 21, 2003, blackdarkness (228)By person wrote:

    very good...I like it...Blacky

  • The_Scavenger On Monday, July 14, 2003, The_Scavenger (30)By person wrote:

    nice right its really good. it is just radiating with emotion. i really like this.

  • Aurora_Light On Sunday, July 13, 2003, Aurora_Light (472)By person wrote:

    well my friend it fits the way you feel about him very well. but it sounds fine to me. nice on my friend

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