Yet I'll still regret

By cadymae




I have regrets I haven't regretted yet

Because I haven't decided I was bad yet

Yet I bother to hope I can discern

                           ***

Blood swelling, but not rivulets yet

Gulped sadnesses to be swallowed yet

Yet I should trust gladness and sating



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Copyright 2012 cadymae
Published on Thursday, January 12, 2012.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, April 11, 2017, carlosjackal (3010)By person wrote:

    I would disagree and say the last line works somehow...Something about pairing sating with gladness brought images of satsumas in the blazing summer sun for me. And the way that offset the rest of the piece...BOOM! :)

  • dwells On Thursday, January 12, 2012, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Great, but the last line was a bit of a let down. Perhaps something like "Yet I watch the bruise take shape" or something better than either one. This was so close,.. thanks.

  • cadymae On Thursday, January 12, 2012, cadymae (73)By person wrote:

    you're right. the last line misses. I'm still chewing on it. Was playing with the "e" and s" of gladness and sadnesses. The idea and cadence and the "yets/regrets" are all there though. I'll come back to it. tnx fer reading.

  • dwells On Friday, January 13, 2012, dwells (4288)By person wrote:

    Perhaps "gladness and madness"??? You know best, thanks.

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