Villanelle -- The Price of Infidelity

By SilentStalker

Be still, my love, your time is through
Vengeance tastes so sweet to me
I will be the end of you

As the blade comes into view
I watch you struggle endlessly
Be still, my love, your time is through

But all this time I think I knew
That we were never meant to be
I will be the end of you

The knife comes out a reddish hue
Your throat agape so beautifully
Be still, my love, your time is through

After all you chose to do
Death has been your destiny
I will be the end of you

You were cursed to be untrue
I am here to set you free.
Be still, my love, your time is through
I will be the end of you

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Copyright 2010 Darun Ferguson
Published on Monday, December 20, 2010.     Filed under: "Rage" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Perhaps one of my first 'snuff' poems not spurred by past events, but solely by a contest. Enjoy.

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  • Devilish On Sunday, February 26, 2012, Devilish (3799)By person wrote:

    Hmmmmmm... How sinfully sexy .. Makes me wana touch myself.. Scholar

  • deadlyangel27 On Saturday, March 26, 2011, deadlyangel27 (96)By person wrote:

    Very nice. It had me intrigued for sure. Write on.

  • reddead On Wednesday, January 12, 2011, reddead (25)By person wrote:

    there is something so eerie about the words be still my love. still like it though :)

  • A former member wrote: I read it a few times and tried to shake my bias of such heavily structured work, i dont like villanelles. I'm really upset you won the contest considering this is really run of the mill "you're getting stabbed" poetry. I feel if the poem is doomed to be built on such a rigid platform you should have opted for a more cryptic style. saying "the blade" is SOO played out. you dont have to really spell it out that much, it could have been heaps more violent if it didnt have that kind of obvious descriptor shit. its the kind of thing you find in a sad kids notebook. I'd have dug it if you were getting off more on their struggle and death rather than telling them theyre about to die and how comes.

  • A former member wrote: its not bad, its just not a CHAMPION! youve got a champion in there, i dunno if you just had an off day or if you were pandering to your fans, but its a 4/10 on the badassometer, but props on the appropriate structure and all that. its clean and consistent. just kind of, yawn stab slicey whatever time

  • lupus tenebrae On Thursday, December 30, 2010, lupus tenebrae (1031)By person wrote:

    No surprise you won, when I first read it I could tell it was gold. You took the style, and Stalkerized it, congrats. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: well deserved win :) i definitely have a new found respect for structure and rhyme. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: wicked write, man.. I like the pause for reflection..... the price must be paid... kudos *bows* Scholar

  • dwells On Saturday, July 30, 2011, dwells (5797)By person wrote:

    What is a villanelle for us nimrods?

  • Mars On Monday, December 20, 2010, Mars (338)By person wrote:

    I read this in a whisper. I feel like it calls to be read in a whisper. Seductively dark, I might say. My favorite type of poem. -mars Scholar

  • DarkDruidess On Monday, December 20, 2010, DarkDruidess (358)By person wrote:

    Wow...this one made me smile a little sinister smile that I think will stay with me all day...thank you for that. Well done!

  • purr_verse On Monday, December 20, 2010, purr_verse (1039)By person wrote:

    Oh, sir, you do this so magnificently.

  • A former member wrote: Good lord , D. You weren't just whistling Dixie. I'm humbled and a bit in awe of your raw display of passion and talent here, my friend.---Draven.

  • osculum infame On Monday, December 20, 2010, osculum infame (132)By person wrote:

    'the knife comes out a reddish hue.your throat agape so beautifully'..too rad

  • A former member wrote: great job, sorta like a softcore snuff if you ask me. lol is it weird to say this piece is really you? i think ur style shine through despite the preset structure :)

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