.fogged.up.eyes.

By slow.burn.star

dreamer~
bending branches from the sun
and brightly colored melody transforms me
from the muted colors
of your ~kiss. switch. replay.

shining off reflections from the window.
Taking off like shadows from a bird in flight.
you're never where i need you.

and everything tastes bitter now. almost seventeen.
almost completely jaded. Drifter; pushing sidewalk cracks
and jumbled words. changing pace.

Just the first step, maybe not the last one.
hollowing. H e a v y rain.
the gleam in your eye is dusty. i cant take it back.
cant make you.
but i'll try. flashbacks. i'll remind you.

water beading down strands of my hair. blurry.
fogged up mirrors and white in the corners. slick-
red spattered on the tile.
.freezeframe.
you lost me. rewind. playback. fingertips touching.
electric humming. profile. parting lips with tip of tongue.
slow it down.
steam rising. five more minutes. can you fake it?
just one more line.
battling with my goodbye. you couldn't even promise me.
i'm burning my mouth. stop * -__

face framed.
i'm sorry every things for you.

now theres nothing for you
to brush a w a y...

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Copyright 2003 slow.burn.star
Published on Sunday, June 8, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: yes---simply yes-----do this again. raw rarity.

  • A former member wrote: gorgeous poem. i LOVE it, it displays so much emotion.

  • A former member wrote: Beautifully written

  • flying_fox On Thursday, February 12, 2004, flying_fox (573)By person wrote:

    so beautiful, wonderfully writte, compelling...magnificent write. FF

  • DoctorAsh On Saturday, June 14, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    'Godamnit'GODAMNIT .you:*&^%$#@:!!! Pull the earth over my head and beat me to death with your words' :::sigh::: so beautiful ... so...... le pulchritudinous: Love Love [D&A]

  • Amanda Parnell On Monday, June 9, 2003, Amanda Parnell (57)By person wrote:

    Wow, that is so beautiful. I heard of you from someone, but I can;t remember who. Well, they told me my style merinds them of you. You're so much better. Thanks. *kitten*

  • manywalks On Sunday, June 8, 2003, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    Mesmerizing. The flow and pattern of this was simply perfect. ~ mw

  • silent_screams On Sunday, June 8, 2003, silent_screams (11)By person wrote:

    beautiful - i dig the pace of this, i i lost myself while reading it; it takes strong things for that to happen. and the imagery is amazing.

  • A former member wrote: Just breathtaking...such imagery...well done!!

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