Echo of a Good Night
By Demosthenes
for dave.
~
"Wow"
"This is beautiful"
"Have a wonderful night..."
"This is utterly beautiful"
"...this kind of relationship"
"...and memorable happens..."
"Tears are streaming..."
"Absolutely beautiful"
"I hope..."
"...I... I can't explain..."
"I don't know if I'm crying because I'm jealous..."
"...so you can remember it..."
"...down my face"
"You are so fortunate to have..."
"...something special..."
"Amazing"
"...or because I'm touched by the beauty of this"
"...and be happy"
Isn't it great
How a person can say something
So short, but so perfect
And it still
Makes you smile
For so long?
"Have a wonderful night. I hope something special and memorable happens,
so you can remember it... and be happy..."
And isn't it awful
How a person can say something
So accidental, but so deep
And it still
Burns your heart
Into ashes?
"You are so fortunate to have this kind of relationship. I don't know
if I'm crying because I'm jealous..."
And isn't it ironic
How you can be so happy
At one little goodbye
And so ripped open
That you don't have
What someone is jealous of you for having?
It's a stab in the back
To know in your heart
That they truly believe
You're so lucky
SO DAMN LUCKY!
That you got what you want
That you can tell a happy story
Without lying
When all you've ever done
Is written out wishes
That never came true
And you're too sad to cry
And you're too clever to kill yourself
And you're too clever to cut yourself
And you're changing the subject
Because this will not become
A cutting poem
And you're too stubborn to fall in
No death
No blood
No drugs
No alcohol
No self in-fucking-flicted pain
WELL WHAT THEN?
How about a little goodbye?
"Have a wonderful night.
I hope something special and memorable happens,
so you can remember it.
And be happy."
Thanks Dave.
Comments on "Echo of a Good Night"
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A former member wrote:
I LOVE THIS!
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On Thursday, December 11, 2003, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...wow, the feelings poured from this are overwhelming...much respect earned for even being able to write a work like this; very touching... -Darun
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A former member wrote:
I cant pick a line to quote...the whole piece is just wonderful.This is definatly one of my favourites on the site,Butterfly..xxx...
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A former member wrote:
*wipes away tear* i really felt the emotion of that, i empathize completely. one of the best i've read on the site so far!
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On Saturday, July 12, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
well done my dear.
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On Thursday, June 19, 2003, Elf
(47) wrote:
amazing-sara, you never cease to amaze me
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A former member wrote:
i have felt the same way so many times you have great talent!
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A former member wrote:
"that you can tell a happy story without lying"......im speechless (in a good way) -GOD
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On Monday, June 9, 2003, SeventhCircle
(22) wrote:
this is good. why dont your poems ever touch me? i dont really get them. but poetry that's obvious is rarely good poetry.
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, manywalks
(750) wrote:
Thought provoking, brings about different emotions. Deeper upon a second reading, thanks. ~ mw
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A former member wrote:
. i....well you... got me to cry so be damn proud.
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A former member wrote:
i lvoe it i lvoe it.. its going on ym favorites. yay. happiness
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
wow i like it, seems so deep