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...The Art of Hunting...
By NikesRain
dare me lover
to come closer
you so sweetly innocent and untouched
with your
eyes made from summer nights
staring transfixed with building ravenous
thoughts
sweating over these curves like a vicious downpour
your
pulse betraying how much you long to feel
the heartless winter of
my lips upon your skin
i can see your dark thoughts
are travelling
i hear your blood racing faster like lava to the
sea
grazing me head to stiletto and back again
with that one
gasp caught in your throat
just before you sweep that sultry want
over my hip and let it run down my thigh
don't be
afraid to take a long drink
take a step or two closer to the possibilities
this nightmare fantasy that plagues your sheets
with claws and
caresses especially made for you
leather lace and shadows branding
your imagination
all the things we could do if you only tilt your
head
there's so much to do when you have forever
trade
me your soul and i'll gift you eternity
it only takes one sensuous
sting
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Copyright 2010 NikesRain
Published on Tuesday, July 6, 2010.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "...The Art of Hunting... "
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A former member wrote:
Yet another purely amazing piece of work girl! :)
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A former member wrote:
mmmm sexy. I was caught off guard by whatever was running down "your" thigh.... and I wondered how a tilt of my "head" would result in this sensuous sting..... which, by the way made me think of insects rather than predators... there is a "me" in there that I think should be a "my"....... wrought in pure flesh... this begs to be taken.... relentlessly *bows*
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On Tuesday, July 6, 2010, NikesRain
(1298)
wrote:
if you mean the me in the 3rd line of the second section, nope, my wouldn't convey the sentence correctly... unless i was to say 'my entire body' which i shortened to 'me' instead... sorry if you didn't like the piece and no nothing to do with insects at all.....
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A former member wrote:
oh I liked the erotic tone, don't get me wrong... I could almost hear your sexy voice behind the words teasing me with a sting I'd never swell from ;)... but the "me head to stiletto" perhaps could use a comma.... something like a caesura if not a line break.... so what is running down the thigh ? ;)
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2010, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
ok that's it from now on i'm just going to submit what i write to you for review before posting lol *smacks your ass*
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A former member wrote:
woot! baby.... do it again! That almost stings ;) It's okay.... no previews necessary.... I'll just limit myself to 'amazing write' or 'way to go'..... ?
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On Wednesday, July 7, 2010, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
*winds up a bandanna and snaps your ass again* that's going to leave a mark
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A former member wrote:
mark me, shweets... I'll bare my neck if you tilt your head... ya know.... I must be far removed from the fantastical scene of the ever elusive vampire.... "tilt your head" was completely over mine.
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