The Lake She Lies In

By cre

Air more still
Than ever breath has been
A chasm cracked
An arctic frozen wind
This land caressed
And steeped in chilled decay
So endlessly some winter
Her never-tossed bouquet
To summer's fragrant blossoms
Dawned dissolution's grace
From warmth and tender beauty
A distant freeze remained

And ice more blue
Than tint of absent breath
Embraced this lost December
A dance within a death
Her face beneath the frost
A sight not truly seen
But by the lake she lies in
And the crisp and frozen breeze . . .

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Thursday, May 29, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Chilling. I love it!

  • A former member wrote: haunting and still. beautiful and vivid. i loved it.

  • PaperPromises On Thursday, June 12, 2003, PaperPromises (54)By person wrote:

    chilling affect.. very good flow.. love this one..its gonna be a bookmark ;) -CW

  • A former member wrote: If this is about what i think it is (dying by getting trapped under ice) then you spooked me with an efficiency. Vivid, descript, and lush. :)

  • Jonas On Thursday, June 5, 2003, Jonas (720)By person wrote:

    she's alive but barely breathing sitting in the snow, she knows they're coniving and coming for her now...

  • KittyStryker On Saturday, May 31, 2003, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    brilliantly done, yet again, my dearest cre...

  • Six-Out On Thursday, May 29, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Another masterpiece by the wonderful jane. I get exited everytime you post something, becuase I know it is going to be good. I love it. Beautiful.

  • Nightmare_Evil On Thursday, May 29, 2003, Nightmare_Evil (16)By person wrote:

    It's very pretty... it's not as "muddled" as some other poems I've read where everthing goes wrong. It's different...

  • DoctorAsh On Thursday, May 29, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    hmmm:interesting[an A+].The first thing i felt:Was a long cold view though a block of foggy ice:Looking through at a girl who's been locked inside :prehaps: the broken side of her heart or a relentless thought, where she lay to remain for the duration of

  • DoctorAsh On Thursday, May 29, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    she lay to remain for the duration of her life. Trapped inside the pain of something she cant escape: once inflicted and scared. True, maybe not. Thats the impression i got: Love love [D&A]

  • CharlottesWeb On Thursday, May 29, 2003, CharlottesWeb (511)By person wrote:

    This is quite polar...lovely. Makes me shiver. And the greatness that is Cre's art continues...*bows deeply*..~DW~

  • A former member wrote: :teeth chatter: this is you at your descriptive best.


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