Porcupine

By Sin

My lover is a porcupine
small and skittish
I sought to embrace him
and ease his fright
but he struck at me
poisoning me
with his insecurity

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© 2009 Sin
Published on Friday, May 22, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • carlosjackal On Friday, December 18, 2009, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    POST MORE!!!!!!!!! ;)

  • carlosjackal On Friday, December 18, 2009, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    P.S. Loving the profile pic...You're looking good :O)

  • Dilated View On Thursday, December 17, 2009, Dilated View (583)By person wrote:

    Too cool. You captured the essence of why many would wear porcupine resistant hides. :)

  • A former member wrote: The irony here [for me] is that, a mans survival technique can be the very tool that brings his downfall,...so scared to open up and be seen,... eventually he becomes see through,..shadow on ice,...really enoyed:)

  • A former member wrote: i like the metaphor. and the way the tone turns in an instant. 'small and skittish' catchy =D

  • A former member wrote: bought time you start posting again...................... is not insecurity one of the most damning traits a relationship can be afflicted with?

  • Alanarchy On Friday, May 22, 2009, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    The rhythm is a poison in and of its self. Catching. Smooth as good scotch. Write on, mamma.

  • carlosjackal On Friday, May 22, 2009, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    A metaphor and a half...Look closer at your lover and suddenly those spines show :)

  • Sketso On Friday, May 22, 2009, Sketso (436)By person wrote:

    hrrrm... perhaps I should lay down my quill?

  • A former member wrote: I'm sorry Kristy...My mind took me to 'Wynona's Big Brown Beaver' for a sec. :P with that said, I really enjoy the metaphor and the dark side to the light tone.

  • carlosjackal On Friday, May 22, 2009, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    What a tune! MTV in the Grunge 90s baby, yeah!!

  • Sin On Friday, May 22, 2009, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    dont sweat it, i love Primus ;)

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